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This very straightforward image certainly addresses the concept of "success" in a way that we can all relate to. so you fulfilled the challenge, definitely.
Photographically, it's rather dull, and the score you received shows that. Specific suggestions for improvement:
1. It's cropped very tight, it feels "crowded". More breathing room on all 4 sides would be good, especially on the bottom where it would be nice to see the pocket flap completed.
2. There's a lot of "glare" here, and it is robbing saturation from the ribbons. Did you shoot it with a flash? A light from the side would have worked better, I think.
3. There's an overall sense it's not critically sharp, which is a definite flaw in a shot of this sort.
4. In a more general sense, you could have made this work better by providing more context. Exactly what that would be I don't know, but possibly just to have someone WEARING the jacket so it is "modeled", has dimension, maybe a trace of jawline, let the ribbons and badges be the FOCUS of the image but not the WHOLE of the image, you know?
In any case, thanks for serving! I admire marines :-) My uncle was one... |
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