Lets start by looking at the whole picture...I love the black backgroung. I think it goes great with the cloth you have on. Looking at the eyes really draws me into the picture. In other words, they're at a good level!
This is the part I don't like doing...but the problem I see wrong with the picture is the hand is just in the way. Maybe if it was more like your Wraith picture it would have helped. I would have liked to seen more of the models face. Maybe the hand under the chin would have helped.
Hmm, creative, but what is the photographic intent of the picture? I'm not sure. Political? Artistic? It's too bad the compression left that moire pattern on her forehead. 5
A good idea, but your image is coming across as pixelated on my screen, whereas other entries in the challenge have not. I also wonder how this would look as a black and white photo with a bit more contrast?