What part of Long Exposure did not work here?:-)

Nikon AF-S NIKKOR 24-70mm f/2.8G ED

06/23/2010 12:43:41 AM · #1

Ok. Get your saws out, and dissect this one for me.

What part of Long Exposure did not work here?:-)

Was it the ineffective shadow?

Or ineffective lighting?

Or the intentional graininess?

Or it just lacked the colors and beauty of the waterfalls or ocean waves?

Thanks as always for being gory. Please be brutal, but in a way that would give me something to improve. Example: if you say 'this' didn't work, please also explain how to do 'this' better:-)

Message edited by author 2010-06-23 00:48:49.

kenskid

Nikon D700

06/23/2010 12:50:27 AM · #2

I gave it a 6...my avg score.

I liked the secondary image (on the wall) better than the sitting one. For me, the sitting one expressing Grief but I could not make the connection with the shadowy figure on the wall...(even though I liked the shadow effect)

Canon EF-S 18-55mm f/3.5-5.6 IS

06/23/2010 12:54:50 AM · #3

Steve: Thank you. I think I need to work on how to better execute a plan in future.

Kenny: I start to agree with your comment about a weak connection between the sitting pose and the shadow. Thanks for showing me that.

My intent was that when grief becomes unbearable, one feels like pushing the walls of comfort out to make more breathing room. But obviously I failed to convey that physically:-)

Thank you again.

Message edited by author 2010-06-23 00:55:13.

michaelmonn

Canon EOS-5D Mark II

Canon EF 85mm f/1.8 USM

06/23/2010 07:47:58 AM · #4

i agree with kenny's opinion but i also believe that it would be difficult for you to do very well with a long exposure portrait simply because of the lack of an ocean. i realize that there are exceptions to this general trend BUT the very well established trend is that the majority of the very high scoring shots for this kind of thing ( in addition to many other challenges) are sunsets on the ocean taken with a long exposure.

EL-ROI

Canon EOS-450D Rebel XSi

06/23/2010 08:01:51 AM · #5

I think the setting is bad and the person is really hairy! The mood of the picture is affected by the carpet and baseboard which doesn't lend itself to the actions being taken. The hairy part was a joking half truth!

kenskid

Nikon D700

Nikon AF-S NIKKOR 24-70mm f/2.8G ED

06/23/2010 08:02:39 AM · #6

I commented already but in answering you about the colors and waterfalls....Yes...DPC voters seem to like the sweet shots. You have to be very good to pull off a high score on your type of shot.

Originally posted by Prash:

Ok. Get your saws out, and dissect this one for me.

What part of Long Exposure did not work here?:-)

Was it the ineffective shadow?

Or ineffective lighting?

Or the intentional graininess?

Or it just lacked the colors and beauty of the waterfalls or ocean waves?

Thanks as always for being gory. Please be brutal, but in a way that would give me something to improve. Example: if you say 'this' didn't work, please also explain how to do 'this' better:-)

Yo_Spiff

Olympus OM-D E-M5 Mark III

Olympus 12-100mm f/4.0 M.Zuiko ED IS PRO

06/23/2010 08:46:04 AM · #7

Originally posted by michaelmonn:

the very well established trend is that the majority of the very high scoring shots for this kind of thing ( in addition to many other challenges) are sunsets on the ocean taken with a long exposure.

In other words, stick with proven cliche shots?

pixelpig

Sony Alpha a55

Sony DT 1.8/50mm SAM

06/23/2010 10:04:40 AM · #8

Originally posted by Yo_Spiff:

Originally posted by michaelmonn:
the very well established trend is that the majority of the very high scoring shots for this kind of thing ( in addition to many other challenges) are sunsets on the ocean taken with a long exposure.

In other words, stick with proven cliche shots?

If Prash had posed the sitting figure out on a lonely jagged rock at the edge of a beautiful ocean during a stunning display of cloud formations lit up by the setting sun, then of course it would have scored much higher. I'm so bored by beautiful sunsets, but evidently the voters will never tire of the easy ooh/ahh shots. It's a fact of life. That doesn't mean we have to pander to the voters, though.

one2one

Olympus E-5

Olympus 7-14mm f/4.0 Zuiko Digital Zoom

06/23/2010 10:15:53 AM · #9

Number one reason I didn't vote it high is that weird looking pose by the wall. It looks awkward. What does it try to achieve? I have no idea.

Nikon D200

Nikon AF-S DX NIKKOR 18-200mm f/3.5-5.6G ED VR II

06/23/2010 10:25:37 AM · #10

A dark emotion like "grief" needs a dark toned image - this was almost high key and lacked good tonal range altogether.

Next, you got your shadow looking like it's trying to climb out of the body, like it's trying to escape? This doesn't really go well with the body posed on the floor, looking all hopeless and like grief is being embraced rather than let go.

With regard to your location in the house, it's boring. Sorry, but it is. Somewhere dark and dirty might have been better. For example, a prison cell would have been brilliant with the shadow trying to escape and given the viewer a reason for the grief. In any event, a background functions best when it doesn't detract from the focal point BUT ALSO lends context to the main idea of the image.

The reason this didn't work well is because the main elements of your photograph (along with the processing) contradict each other.

IMO, of course.

06/23/2010 11:24:08 AM · #11

Hey thanks guys! I think I understand the glitches now. I must say it could have done better if I took care of some of the mentioned shortcomings.

Y'all have a good one, as I turn back to my tilted entry that is bombing too;););)

elsapo

Canon EOS-5D Mark II

Canon EF 50mm f1.2L

06/23/2010 11:28:50 AM · #12

Take a look at Jason's recent image in the double exposure challenge, similar concept but more emotion.