Portrait of a Breakup
by Sunshine86

Comment:
**** Greeting from the Critique Club ****

Challenge
- Relevant to the Challenge? Yes

Compostion
- Good or Bad? How can it be fixed? A comment below mentions her cropping right arm from the left side of the image. I'd agree that this would focus our attention on her upset face.
- Good use of Depth of Field? Yes
- Good focus? Yes

Lighting
- Good use of light? Lighting is key here. What you have here is a tad too harsh. Reduce the amount of light hitting her (more distance, diffuse). I'll grant that she's 'distressed', but lighting is supposed to support the mood not dominate it. Lighting near the camera such as this gives a very flat looking face. Notice that the only shadows are under her nose and chin. Move the light to be 45 degrees to the camera to give her face some shape. Matbe powder her nose to keep from reflecting.

Aesthetics/Artistic Appeal:
- Colors and Contrast. Nice contrast here. You might try desaturating to further the mood. -30 to -50 would flatten the colors giving a more somber mood.
- What is my reaction or feelings? I like the idea, but the execution needs a little work. You're trying to compel me to feel sympathy for her , but it just misses. The running 'mascara' doesn't quite look right, and her eyes need a little 'puffiness' under them. The story being told here isn't quite believable.

Hope this helps.

Does Water Conduct Electricity ?
by sir_bazz

Comment:
Maybe crop the splash drops from the bottom, er top, so the looks more like a jump instead of an rotated drop. First glance I thought it was jumping from a spoon. Ha!

Edit: Crop not cop. Freudian slip?

Message edited by author 2006-05-03 11:49:24.

Libertine
by fotomann_forever

Comment:
Hmmmm... Makes me pause and think.

G'day Mate!
by cheegirl

Comment:
HA! Thanks for submitting this little one.

Doctor Darts
by Transit

Comment:
I don't understand the trail of red liquid from the dart?

Harmony
by bledford

Comment:
Oh, you must torment me with the large border? I dislike them, but you've gone and done something interesting with it. Torment, I say! Torment!

A Portable View
by andri

Comment:
The subject seems to be the WINDOW vs. the window FRAMING THE SUBJECT.

Eyes
by carlos

Comment:
To be honest a better title REALLY could have saved you in this case. 'Observing Spanish Faith' or 'The Eyes of the Spanish Holy Week'. I think you did a great job of keeping the whites from being blown out. You're right about the eyes needing a bit more exposure, but for DPC you didn't have that liberty. I'm not sure about the composition, however. It may be a bit too tight.

It sucks that this was not received better. As others have said, it's a good capture independent of the perceived politics.

Eugene
by Tranquil

Comment:
I look like I'm in pain (vs. my BEING a pain). I didn't like the light we had here. Did I mention I need a haircut? Oh well. Nice take.

Hrmm...
by Tranquil

Comment:
HA! Damn teenage hormones... Great catch except that disembodied hand on the right side. ;)