Hope
by Eyesup

Comment by sfalice:
Greetings from the Critique Club

Welcome to DPC. I see this is just your second Challenge entry and you already have a feel for the community as many photographers have commented on your entry and have given you valuable information if find it helpful.

Your entry was selected at random by the 'elves' that live in the DPC Critique Club program, and I was lucky enough to draw your image.

Since many of the points I might address have already been touched on by those who commented during and after the Challenge, I'll limit myself to just one compositional suggestion. And, obviously, this is just a suggestion:

Very frequently, when an image is divided in half (in this instance: cross in one half; statue in the other) a viewer doesn't know which is more important, and simply moves on to the next image in the queue. Since we want the viewer to linger and appreciate our own work, it is usually best to make one section of the image more important than the other. In this case, the statue is more in focus and could have taken up more of the space with ease, and also might have given a stronger reason for the background cross to be OOF.

In any event, I do hope you enjoy your participation in DPC. I'll look forward to seeing more of your work.

SFAlice

Essential Elements
by Eyesup

Comment by lauraodom:
Meets Challenge - 2
Lighting/Processing - 1
Composition - 1
Overall Impression - 1
"WOW" factor - 0
Score: 5

Essential Elements
by Eyesup

Comment by Elvis_L:
sorry but this editing is just sloppy. it looks like you selected the counter and either painted it black or reduced the brightness to 0 but you can see by the bowl and by the coffe pot where you missed spots.

The Long Walk
by Eyesup

Comment by whiteroom:
just a bit too photoshopped i'd say, for dpc voters.
prolly would have looked great in black/white.
the comp is more about the lines and perspective than faceless.
just my opinion, hope it helps.

The Long Walk
by Eyesup

Comment by fotomann_forever:
Some constructive criticism:

Composition is ok, but feels a bit unbalanced.

The forward part of the image is a bit too dark with flat mid-tones. An s-curve could have help your mid-tone contrast some. Also a bit of contrast masking could have helped pull some details from the shadows. (Both s-curves and contrast masking are covered in the forums - the master being Bear_Music)

You might have scored a bit better with a tighter zsoom as your subject sorta gets lost in the composition.

The Long Walk
by Eyesup

Comment by silverscreen:
it's a nice picture. Lighting and composition is OK, but it's not even close to being a portrait - faceless or not...
A portrait should tell something about the person - this picture tells something about the place.

Essential Elements
by Eyesup

Comment by Nuzzer:
6: Good idea and composition but the light on the cereal is a bit bright and the reflection on the blender is quite prominent

Essential Elements
by Eyesup

Comment by Maagic:
I don't know how any kid could eat those... Frosted mini wheats FTW!

The Long Walk
by Eyesup

Comment by Mick:
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Message edited by author 2007-09-10 20:21:19.

The Long Walk
by Eyesup

Comment by jeannybeany:
This is a little too dark, but i like the leading lines that draw you to the person.