Boring - I know your every move
by Abra

Comment by spiritualspatula:
Hello, and greetings from the Critique Club.

I think you’ve come up with a good idea for this challenge. It is a good idea for the challenge, especially with such a quick capture. Some things that I think could help things- I’ll agree with what the comments say. I think a large reason your score suffered was the fact that both sides have some ghosting going on, so your subjects don’t appear to be legitimately there, which is a definite part of a great shot in this genre. It is also noted that a darker background benefits these shots, which I also agree with because it helps to separate your subjects and decrease and ghost effect you may get- it’s the texture on the wall behind that really makes this look ghosty. The scene itself is lacking a bit contrast and is a bit dark. Your white pieces are not quite white enough and a large portion of your tones drop down into the lower zones with very little detail. Some technical notes- somebody commented on the sharpness of the photo, which does seem a bit soft. You might consider not shooting at quite a small aperture. After a certain point (generally somewhere in the f/16 range) you begin to experience diffraction and your sharpness will actually start to decrease across the entire depth of field. I would also recommend you drop your iso down to base, since noise quickly becomes an issue in longer exposures (not necessarily an issue here, but a general note). To compensate for this, you will obviously have to decrease your shutter speed a bit to keep the ambient knocked down. By doing this, you will also strengthen the double exposure effect and prevent ghosting some. To further the effect, increase the power of your flashes as well. Though this will increase the amount of time for the flash duration (assuming you’re using a speedlight, it’s reversed if you’re using monoblocs), it should not be to the point that it has an effect since you’re dealing with slow moving subject matter. I like your composition, but would maybe back things out a bit more, as it feels a little bit cramped to me. The posing seems very natural, as well.

Boring - I know your every move
by Abra

Comment by graphicfunk:
These images have more impact with a darker background. Good facial expressions.

Hang in there
by Abra

Comment by mrbig65:
hehe,,,, like this,,,,,,

Hang in there
by Abra

Comment by mycelium:
ooh. snail yoga.

Audley
by Abra

Comment by noraneko:
I love the mood here. Wish there was just a little more contrast.

Audley
by Abra

Comment by EgillP:
The tones in the people and the pier look too similar. Otherwise a nice rural study. The border actually works here.

Boring - I know your every move
by Abra

Comment by prashant_168:
Both the images of you have ghost effect.

You should have controlled the light settings more for a better picture

Audley
by Abra

Comment by bvy:
(26/38) Very nicely composed. I wonder if you could have experimented with different black and white channels such that the people didn't blend in with the background.

Boring - I know your every move
by Abra

Comment by Spooky11:
Here I miss acerbity.

Audley
by Abra

Comment by dancingwolfgrrl:
Too much going on -- where do you want me to look?