IMG_8230.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by theSaj:
Much better, I like how the hair blocks her fact a touch but only non essentials. I like the positioning much better than the last one. Her neck still suffers from an unnatural angle in this shot but her face looks much more relaxed and natural.

White is a very hard color to expose well. Consider alternate colors if you re-shoot. The light blue was nice on her...

IMG_8202.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by theSaj:
Not really digging this one, I think it's cropped to close and almost makes me feel like she's got her hand to her head in an expression of "oh dear" or "stressed out". She definitely needs to relax a touch more...

IMG_8198bw.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by theSaj:
I like this shot, even if it's corny... (okay just some humor to make you laugh and relax so you don't take the critiques too hard).

I think there are some exposure issues with areas a touch over exposed. I think some dodging/burning might draw out some highlights. Or perhaps push it even further and make it more of a high-key shot.

This is a pretty good entry. But I am still left asking...why is the model so expressionless? Perhaps part of that is she is looking right at you, this has the effect that her irises are pressed against the edge of her eyelids. Get her to look to the right of you and it will center her iris more and help to reduce the white space of her eyes. Perhaps adding more depth to her expression.

- Saj

IMG_8168.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by alien2thisworld:
I like this shot over all. I think that cropping off the bottom to remove the ground in the bottom left and her foot would simplify the image a little. The model is naturally beautiful, though this pose looks a little too... posed. I love the facial expression, though I think more relaxed body poses would work better for her.

IMG_8168.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by theSaj:
Here, I cropped it a little differently

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Message edited by author 2006-04-03 13:43:07.

IMG_8168.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by theSaj:
Much improved over the first one....

The pose is more fitting for her shape, but there is still room for improvement.

- the bottom left is distracting.
- the model is not relaxed, get her to relax. As you said, she's new to this and that's one of the toughest aspects of inexperienced models. Get her to relax, smile, be herself and yet be maleable and posable.
- crop shows one sandle and cuts off the other foot and rest of dress, this becomes distracting
- model is really too centered. Consider shifting, perhaps a tighter crop might work too improve as well.
- also, take note that you've let the skirt sag in between her legs instead of maintaining smooth curves. It now has a deflated feel.

Message edited by author 2006-04-03 13:51:55.

IMG_8235.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by theSaj:
Will be giving you "honest" critiques. As such they are meant to be constructive but may be harsh.

This one, will be kinda harsh...

I'd consider discard this one...here's why

- face / head position, to strained, poor expression on face
- the breasts are way over-exposed
- the pose is kinda odd, and almost makes her look pop-belly, and yes she's a think model.
- composition forces rotation and makes for a weird angle feeling

What is good:
- the color is nice, I think the tones and saturation could be heigtened for a touch of surreal even

Sorry, this one missed the boat a lot for me. That said....this is meant to be constructive. So although I am being critical, I don't mean any slight by it.

- Saj

IMG_8179.jpg
by luv2photo

Comment by dwterry:
Love this one. It's the best of the bunch.

Weathered
by luv2photo

Comment by kari1:
way too small.

Weathered
by luv2photo

Comment by Katmystiry:
Nice use of sepia