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GeneralEComment by ursula: From the Critique Club
Hi, Paul,
I am so glad I get to write something about your postcard! For now at least it's more fun for me to write about photos I like. Someday, when I learn to be diplomatic and witty, I might enjoy writing about photos I don't like.
On first impression, your postcard hit me as a bit "corny" (like any good self-respecting postcard SHOULD be). It's also "so academia". I guess the lettering is what gave me that impression (duh!).
I love the powerful sky! Plain skies are so boring. The white tower is beautifully framed by the dark trees. The dark trees match the mood of the sky.
I'm wondering if you tried going in a bit closer, for instance, cropping about 1/6 of the total width off the left hand side, 1/8 to 1/9 off the right hand side, and about 1/5 of the total height off the top - nothing off the bottom. Lettering in the same place, same style, possibly even slightly bigger. It might make it a more powerful postcard.
About the lettering, two things.
(1) The "K" and "Y" look a bit ragged. Might be the font. You did have the anti-alias turned on for the lettering, right? Some of the entries to "Postcard" did not.
(2) The spacing (the distance between the individual letters) is not consistent. For example, the distance between "B" and "E", "E" and "L", and "E" and "Y" is larger than the distance between "E" and "R" or "K" and "E". This last distance would seem to be the correct, or best, choice. Sometimes this is a problem with the font. In such a case, I manually move the letters (when the lettering is important) so that the spacing looks just right.
Anyway. I enjoyed looking at this postcard again, and in greater detail. It's a fun postcard, it makes me smile. Take care,
Ursula I Abresch
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