Gloria Annby
Toniann220Comment: CRITIQUE CLUB CRITIQUE
by karmat
You have done some things very well here. She looks comfortable in her pose and her make up and hair is absolutely fabulous. I like the natural light, but for this pose, it lights "too much." I think some sidelighting, or even backlighting might help it to be more dramatic. If you want to keep the natural light, i would suggest a closer crop so that just her face is showing.
Several people commented on her size, and I am wondering if the pose you have her in actually makes her look larger than she is. Straight on, unless you are toothpick sized, will always make you look larger if I am not mistaken. Perhaps if she were turned slightly and looking back at you it would be more flattering.
You met the challenge. The shot is bw, and it is okay. I think a bit more contrast would help to add interest. To me, it seems as if there is a dark gray ranging to a lighter gray, but no distinct blacks and whites, and this gives the shot a "flat" feeling.
The background -- that one item probably dropped your potential score more than anything. A wrinkled background appears hurried and sloppy. Either iron it, or take the wrinkles out in post processing.
Overall, pretty well done.
If I need to further clarify anything, please let me know.
karmat
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