Transparent
by karenk

Comment:
I like the idea, and your technique seems to have given you good results. However, the wall in the background looks like it's chopping her head off. Perhaps a solid color/texture wall would work better?

Junk
by kyled93

Comment:
I have to point out the obvious... This is a "Single Light Source" challenge, and you have 5 light sources visible, and 2 that are right above you.

Unicorn
by gmink

Comment:
This was probably a tough subject to shoot. Your whites are blown into a blob of white at the bottom, but if you had bumped up your shutter speed, you probably would have lost detail in the top of the unicorn.

While the colors are nice, and your subject is probably something very pretty to have in your house, it will not likely do well here in a photo. Photos of "stuff" generally don't score well.

We've all taken photos of "stuff" to work on technique, but generally it's not something you should enter into a photo contest.

Bethany - The Goddaughter
by Saswaa

Comment:
There's a very large shadow behind your model. Don't be afraid to move your furniture further from the wall.

There's also no true blacks or whites in the photo, which is causing it to look very flat to me. I use Curves in Photoshop to make sure I have whites and blacks set to create the best depth. With this photo I used the black eyedropper in Curves to make the blacks blacker. Doing this made your subject pop right out of the background.

***W***
by Ivo

Comment:
Im not sure I'm completely sold on this image, but I can see great potential with your idea. I love the colors, and your exposure seems to be dead on.

This is a subject that works very well as a centered subject. Unfortunately, you're not centered perfectly, and you've lost some of that initial impact.

The border is also not doing anything for the photo. Perhaps if the border were a solid, sharp line. It looks like you may have used a fuzzy/feathered brush to create your border. As it is now, you've already got a lot of fuzzy elements. The sharpness would give the viewer's eyes something to hold on to, and would bring the sharpness of the glass throughout the photo. Again, adding more impact.

Gerbil Tube of Life
by bassbone

Comment:
Yay! Nice place for a great photo, Peter!

Dear I fear we're facing a problem, you love me no longer.
by amandapaige119

Comment:
I'm sure by now you've figured out that your title confused a lot of people, and probably hurt your score a little bit. The first thing that bothered me about this photo from the thumbnail is how close the arm is to the left side of the image. I do this a lot myself, which is probably why it was the first thing to bug me, heh. She looks cramped because of this, I think.

For an image like this to do really well on this site, I think people would want to see something more interesting done with the lighting. I know, I know, it's a silhouette, but the lighting on the background is flat. There's no eyecandy, basically.

Which leads me to something that would have instantly bumped the score. Breasts! For a couple reasons. Firstly just the natural male attraction to them means no male would give you less than a 6, heh. Secondly, your model seems chopped. Maybe if that tidbit of breast on the right wasn't in the photo it would seem more complete.

I'm at work now, so I can't play with the cropping, but I'm curious what it would look like if you actually cropped into the arm. Perhaps started the crop on the outside of her armpit on the left of the photo.... wait!

Okay, bare with me. Actually, I just tried that in MSpaint and I think I figured out what bothers me with the lighting. She's looking to the
right side of the photo, but the light is behind her. Your eye is naturally drawn to the lightest part of the photo. She's looking to the right, the viewer is looking to the left. This creates tension. If the light were on the right, we'd follow her gaze.

(And cropping that little tidbit of breast out helped with the chopped off feeling. That distraction is no longer there.)

Sorry to have rambled a bit. No time to edit! I'm already 15 minutes over my lunch break, heh.

Edit: I thought I'd come back and show you the crop I was talking about.



Message edited by author 2007-10-06 16:01:21.

trasparent silhouettes
by jamesfrater

Comment:
As others have pointed out, this is a nice idea. The focus is pretty good.

The composition is probably what hurt you. The image is tilted and the contrast in the window between the black and whites make it very obvious. Also the image as a whole seems off balance. I attribute this to the window framing. Your eye is naturally drawn to the whites, and they take your eye off to the left which distracts from your subject. If you were to pull back a little and frame your subject with your window, I think your photo would have a more centered direction.

Eye Candy
by bryanbrazil

Comment:
I'm confused why so many people thought this DNMC. This is a macro of candy isn't it? I never even questioned it until I just read the comments.

A Bushel of Jelly Beans
by bassbone

Comment:
Wow.. this did a lot better than we had hoped, heh.