All American Momby
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Composition
The nearly square crop makes the shot a little bit static for me. The subject is neither centered nor effectly offset from center, so my eyes don't go to any of the natural "spots". The crop is also a little too close to both the pie and the flag, making my eye wander out of the frame with regularity. Perhaps cropping so that her face was basically on the upper right "thirds" intersection and have her hold the pie on the lower left "thirds" intersection would have yielded more compostional punch.
Camera Work
There are quite a few hot spots (small, overexposed areas) in the image. This includes the stripes in the flag, the spots on her sweater, and even some highlights around her eyes. The use of the flash has made the image very harsh - much harsher than I think a picture of a "mom" (soft and sweet) should be. I think you've tried to correct for this later, but starting with a 1/3 stop underexposed image might have given better results. I would also recommend either diffusing the flash or using bounce flash off the ceiling. The bounce usually yields incredibly better skin tones. You've used f/1.8, and I would think it is intentional, seeing that you have increased the background blur with post processing. A smaller aperture (larger number) would have made it possible, I think, to keep the mom, the flag, and the pie ALL within the depth of field and made a much stronger image. If you were indeed using a flash, you should have been able to do that.
Post Processing
You received several negative comments about the processing, and I don't want to rehash unnecessarily, but some things do bear mentioning. The pie looks pasted in, the reds are oversaturated, and the blur / noise removal to her face are dominating features which really detract from the image. If you would like to discuss this further, feel free to drop me a PM and I will be glad to go into more details.
My Thoughts
This is a nice idea and a beautiful model. Personally, I really would like to compare the orginal from the camera to the end result and perhaps explore some different PP paths. I think this could have been made into a stronger image than you have submitted here.
I apologize if this comes across as a harsh critique; I don't mean it to be unnecessarily so. I do make a specific effort, when doing a critique, to be as blatantly honest as I can without being rude or obtrusive. My intent is to help the photographer improve as much as possible. I hope you find these thoughts to be helpful and informative. If you have questions or would like to discuss further, please feel free to PM me at any time.
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