|I've decided to comment on every shot in this challenge, since I'm sitting at 1 comments, and I'd rather try and take a positive approach to this rather than simply whining about my score:
I like the decision to focus more on what the model is wearing, other than the model itself. I'd considered a similar approach, but chickened out in the end. However, the focus, as I see it, seems to be a bit missed in this photo. Or, more specifically, the sharpness (it may not be a focus issue at all). There just doesn't seem to be enough detail in the texture, and the shot loses some of the ipact because of this.