greetings from the Critique Club!
I grinned when I saw this shot, am a fan of humour and creativity esecially when you really only have desklamps and bristol board to work with. Love to see the amount of work and care put into inserting photography terms into the shots, and the DPC Y LOW is great!
The black at the top is extraneous and just draws the eye back to there, to where there is nothing to see. Cropping it down to just a bare minimum would have helped tremendously. Your shutter speed could have been slowed down and the aperture closed down, too, and added tremendous dof, if a tripod had been handy.
So artistically, what you want to capture is fine, but in shots where it is difficult to tell a story, you want to give a sense of mood. The flatness of the bg and strong lighting both draw attention to themselves and less to the words on the board.
Hope this helps, feel free to PM me with any questions,
Susan
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