Greetings from the Critque Club!
Composition:
Your composition seems a little forced. The photo doesn't appear very natural, more like forced, like you took this shot to fit the challenge. Which doesn't help it. Your background (the blanket?) is slightly distracting, A blank background such as a table, or solid color would've helped this. There isn't much room in any direction except the top. The bottom of the bible is cut off as well as the right side of the magazine. Getting 'the full picture' will help you quite a bit.
It seems like you wanted to hide the title of both subjects. Not sure why. As people commented it is extremely distracting, and I really can't think of why you would need to do that.
Lighting:
It looks like your flash was used for this photo. The flash was too close to the subjects so it wound up adding glare to the bottom of both the bible, and the magazine. I think you'll find much more natural colors using natural light in your house, or moving further away from your subject using flash.
Technical:
Your picture looks to be in focus, no motion blurring or anything like that. The photo seems too bright at the bottom, and too dark at the top. Getting that uniform exposure with natural light will greatly help your photo(s).
Post-Processing:
I can't see much editing done to the photo. It looks like it was cropped and or resized. (see composition) The glare at the bottom can be removed in editing software by adjusting the contrast / brightness etc. This would also help your photo.
Overall:
You chose a nice theme, one I choose very often. Your photo could've been much better carried out, however. Most importantly the composition, both the background and the too tight of crop. The lighting needs work for this photo to be better. I recommend you take a little time to setup your photos better. Think about the end result as you get it ready. Try to picture in your mind not just a photo that matches the challenge of the week, but really is a photograph without the challenge to make it work. Try to take photos you'd be proud to hang in a picture frame on your wall.
I look forward to seeing your future submissions!
Message edited by author 2004-06-29 06:20:51. |
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