ewwwwww! ;) cool lighting.. I'm not sure if the contrast in tones from the bug to the screen works for me (perhaps try a background on your screen with some richer, more golden hues to pull it all together), but still a cool picture
The fly crawling over the eye on the computer monitor is an interesting subject. The largest half of the frame is a bit cluttered by the rest of the monitor which is a bit blurry. It took me a second to figure out what this was. I imagine the monitor was one of your obvious sources of light?
To be honest I can't figure this out. I think I understand what you're trying to do but the composition hurts the effort. This may be a great idea but just impossibly difficult to capture.