|Greetings from the Critique Club
First of all congratulations on a new PB.
i am going to list the pros and the cons of the picture in my opinion of course:
when i first looked at it, the shot made me wonder on what's the story behind these two , are they friends, are they foes, are they stranger.
and this is what a good street photographer should do (in my opinion of course) , be able to intrigue the viewer, and you def. achieved that in your shot.
as far as technical stuff go the composition is good , and focus is perfect.
like one of the commenters said, the tree in the back is distracting, it pulls you away from both person. perhaps you could have added a layer to blur more the background.
the black and white conversion needs some work, the colors are a bit flat, more contrast would have def. gave this more impact, probably playing more with curves, or brightness/contrast.
finally, althought the shot intrigues the viewer, it lacks the candid factor and i think that's what hurt your score the most.
overall i think you did a great job, a 5.7 is a good score here at DPC, hope you keep it up.