|Hey there from the Critique Club
Camera Work/Technical: Very clean, crisp focus, as well as a great depth of field. Also, your choice of white balance created very nice, warm tones providing a very inviting feeling to the image.
Lighting: I'd really like to see more light on the side of her face that is toward the camera. While the shadows fit nicely into this image, this part of her face is a bit too dark, thus pulling and holding the viewer's eye into the dark void.
Composition/Content: I agree that this one needed a tongue, but I also think some nose should have been included. Without the nose, the faces looks like it has some sort of uncomfortable deformity. This one was not far off the first place finisher. I even like your tones better, but you needed that nose.
My Opinion: I think the concept is far batter than the score it pulled, but it suffered in its execution. This really wasn't far from being a personal best. In my opinion, it only needed a nose and a little less shadow.