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06/28/2006 05:16:20 AM |
Greetings from the Critique club.
What a great character study.
I'll start at the technical end, which to my mind is pretty much bang on, you're exposure is good on a contrasty subject, and the B&W conversoin is solid with a good range of tones in the skin and complimentary tones in the shoulder and most of the window.
Focus is good, and you've not been tempted to use the sharpening tools too much as many here on DPC seem to think is mandatory. Making this image tack sharp would have detracted from the wonderful expression on your models face.
I find the highlights on the hair at the top of the frame to be a little distracting, as is the light band showing through the window. Both pull me away from staring into the eyes of the model, where my attention should be. I would have been tempted to dodge/burn (darken, can never remember which is which) the stripe a bit, and maybe crop the top a little more to remove those distrations.
Cropping the top would give the girl a little more space to gaze into as well. I feel her vision is cramped a little.. By that I mean the image is taller than it is wide, and she's looking diagonally out of the frame.. Maybe slighty more of her reflection and less top would fix that? Probably just me. :-).
You've got some great compositional elements in here, by design or accident. Triangles are very strong 'anchors' for an image. The dark area of shoulder and hair is one, neck and jaw line, the eye-line cutting the image diagonally in half. Very solid elements...
As some others mentioned I think the title is maybe a little weak, which loosens the fit for the challenge a little, although I think it's a lovely photo outside the context of the challenge, and would probably have faired well in a different competition with the same title.
Great work, thanks for sharing..
Cheers, Chris Hellyar. |
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06/27/2006 09:28:15 AM |
Hi!
The emotion is very well portraied here. I like the clarity of the rain and you did a good job with the cropping:)
Well done... |
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06/23/2006 06:31:34 AM |
| Good subject and clarity of the rain. |
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06/23/2006 01:55:50 AM |
| NOw thats not right?? Downright depressing I say! |
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06/21/2006 06:50:37 PM |
| Back to bump. This is a great shot - perfect expression and just enough reflection in the window to set it off. The title doesn't scream "desolation" to me but her expression does, so here's a bump. |
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06/20/2006 07:20:47 PM |
| Very nice portrait. IMHO would perhaps have done better with a more dramatic caption. Rain on vacation is just not everyone's idea of desolation. 7 |
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06/20/2006 02:25:53 PM |
| I like the feel of this shot. good work. |
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06/20/2006 03:37:17 AM |
| I think your title really takes away from the power of the image you captured, the look on the girls face has a real feel of sadness and I feel like I want to imagine for myself why she feels this way. And then when your title tells me its only because its wet outside and she can't go out and play, well to me the story a viewer would come up with would be more powerful or allow us to reflect on a time when we felt this way. Its just my opinion. and still a great capture of the moment. |
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06/20/2006 12:31:36 AM |
| very stong emotion evoked in this picture |
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