First impressions I really like this shot .. but my preference was the first one ... it left more to the imagination .. and teased the mind a little more.
Subject This meets the challenge, head on ... and streaming away.
Composition The composition is good, the use of the bullet on the thirds line in excellent ... the words going up the inside of the vertical thirds is excellent.
Technicals This is very high key .. and for that it works .. I know you have taken on the comments recieved .. and it shows that your orginal worked extremely well .. and sometimes on executing the changes suggested ... it no longer works as well.
The picture has very good focus ... and great motion capture ... there is not as much fluid as the first shot .. and I think this makes a different.
Improving Stick to the original ... it was great ... it is hard to replicate and get better scores .. unless you are replicating a low scorer in the first place.
Final word You did great .. took on the comments .. and really made a go of it ... good work .. keep it up.
If you have any comments on this critique feel free to PM me.
I like the idea, parts of the can seem possibly over worked (toward the top of the can there are spots of magenta). If there would've been anyway to get more soda/liquid coming out of the can that might've added to it just a little to draw you into the picture more. just my two cents
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