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05/10/2006 12:53:44 PM |
Greetings from the Critique Club!
I saw this during the challange and thought to myself, "This would be a perfect photo for an article either on divirsity, homelessness or even how our society had changed from a more open to a more suspecious one." I liked the shot overall but something left me off. The colors are great, the expressions are wonderful and I had to come back to it a couple of times to figure out what was bothering me and I finally think I put my finger on it. The balance seems off. You have the man on the left right by the border but the man on the right is more no the thirds line. It's the bench on the right either being cut off or not being cut off enough that seems to bothering me the most. Just putting my hand up and bringing the right side up to the umbrella makes a big difference on the composition of the shot.
Other than that I really can't say much else about the shot, it was the only thing that was really bothering me overall about the shot. :)
Hope my comments help and good luck in future challenges, though after your ribbon you might not need it, LOL :)
Deannda |
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05/09/2006 10:59:38 PM |
hello again,
i am sorry, i really don t have anything to say about this image.
i scored it a 5. rarely do i tell the score but there is just something that i dont like and i cannot tell what it is. i am looking at it and i still wanna give it a 5 but i dont know why. i dont know what to make it better. i just dont have anything. sorry. |
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05/09/2006 10:52:15 AM |
~trading post~
This is a wonderful candid, but not entirely sure if its photojournalism-worthy imho - makes a social comment, but can't really see it accompanying a news item.
The format works well, drawing out the space between the two characters. The slightly awkward horizontal positioning of the two people (ie not symmetrical, not on thirds) also adds to the feeling of unconnectedness. The vertical positioning of the bench is perfect in completing the composition, and putting the f/g in context.
I think it could have been improved by using a larger aperture, so a more restricted dof would make the b/g slightly less distracting - I was going to suggest a slight desat of the b/g, but I tried it and was not convinced. |
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05/08/2006 10:43:59 PM |
| Very cool image, the two gents reflecting one another very well. Their differences make them as interesting as the fact that they are both positioned almost identically: one very bearded, one clean-shaven; one black, one white; one jacket on, one off; one with bare feet and sandals, one with shoes; one striped, one checked, one with stuff, one unencumbered, one with a hat, one not, etc etc! :) Cool stuff! I love that kind of "tension". That tree in the background separates them in a neat way. Would have loved to see the whole of the right bench. Great image, congratulations. |
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05/08/2006 09:25:58 PM |
Trading Post comment
I gave this a 6, though unless you consider the one looks a bit more eccentric than the other, I don't see the "two worlds". They both look like they probably have a bit in common actually. But that's neither here nor there. The picture works - it gets your attention and keeps it for a bit as you check out the scene. I like the outtake you posted, too, with just the bearded guy, his apple, and umbrella. Good captures! |
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05/08/2006 07:22:27 PM |
[[trading post]]
this is a nice image, but it can be better.
on the right side there is nothing of interest, so you could crop the image so both men were the same distance from the frame, that way the gap between benches hits the rule of third and those beams on the ground leads the eye in to the image towards the big tree.
everything else seems fine :)
just my 2ยข |
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05/08/2006 09:58:41 AM |
Trading post...
First off, I voted a 6 on this. I thought it was a great photograph and really tells a story about the division between people. What I thought could have made it better was if both benches were fully in the frame. It just seems that part of the photo was cut off. Nothing you could really do about that though without losing some of the details of the people. Great job! |
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05/08/2006 02:10:27 AM |
--Trading Post Comment--
Nice score, and I don't see anything wrong with the border. I think that the composition could have benefited from shifting a bit to the left. The gentleman on the left is a bit too close to the frame's edge for me. Terrific colors and wonderful clarity. I think that the 640 pixels allowed here really limited the score that this one could have bought. Nice work! |
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05/08/2006 02:06:10 AM |
I like this photo quite a bit. I read your comments before posting this comment. As far as I am concerned, "photojournalism" is a broad enough catagory to include this picture. It would have been nice if the background were not quite so distracting...but we don't get to place our bus stops where we like them. : )
Good crisp focus and colors. Since this wasn't posed I guess you got lucky with the umbrella and tennis ball. I love their body language too. I would have voted a 6 on this one, 7 if the background wasn't so busy. |
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05/07/2006 09:07:26 PM |
| awesome idea, bad border. the image is a little rough around the edges, but this is a strong story telling shot. |
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05/07/2006 07:29:52 PM |
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05/07/2006 01:56:38 PM |
| my favorite..tells a real story...10 |
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05/06/2006 10:30:53 PM |
| this shot is horribly busy. Im not sure how I would have done it differently though. I do like the idea and the composition despite its busyness. |
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05/05/2006 11:35:04 AM |
| great candid - but is it newsworthy? as a photo I like it (especially the guy on the right), but I don't know what kind of news this would communicate |
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05/03/2006 11:51:41 PM |
| That scene says a lot - nicely done. |
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05/03/2006 11:19:11 AM |
| Technically this is very good. What really makes it work for me is that they do indeed look like they are from two different worlds. How they're sitting, their clothes, and even the tennis ball and umbrella make them seem sooooo different. |
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05/02/2006 07:22:45 PM |
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05/02/2006 04:17:59 PM |
| The background is a bit of a mess and could spoil this but I dont think so as the eyes are drawn totaly to the two main characters. It looks staged but it also looks natural, its easy on the eye yet puts across a powerful message. Good luck |
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05/02/2006 03:10:12 PM |
| A very interesting shot, well composed |
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05/02/2006 04:53:18 AM |
| great capture, the differences are awesome, the compo is very interesting, even the crop is cool :-) |
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05/01/2006 10:25:25 PM |
| If you had used a narrower DOF you could have placed greater emphasis on your subjects. Strong concept. Would like to see this in black and white. |
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05/01/2006 03:52:34 PM |
| OK, this works well for a human interest or feature story. |
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05/01/2006 11:51:15 AM |
| excellent photojournalistic shot |
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05/01/2006 06:41:09 AM |
| Great photo (should have asked the guy with the beard to move to the right of the bench:-) |
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05/01/2006 01:15:26 AM |
| Great Scene! I like the way you framed left. Gives a cool feeling of off balance. 9 |
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