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06/25/2003 10:30:08 AM |
Critique Club Critique
Title: Self and Version 2, Koriyama
Composition: You have a very nicely composed shot here, it has a lot going for it. I like the tightness of it as it gives the viewer the feeling of bonding between you and your little girl. The only thing bad to me is you are a little too much up the nose, which takes some of the appeal away.
Technical: I hate to say it but I feel that you went quite a lot too far in the "High Key" aspect of this wonderfully composed picture. I want to see more detail and less white area. It appears that less sharpening would have been good too.
Challenge: The focal point seems to be more on Sara than you, and I don't blame you a bit! Some viewers have voted you down for this but I think you have made up for it with the emotion and feelings that are displayed in your work.
Suggestions: I would really like to see a less high key rendition. Of course you have probably looked at the picture in many variations already, and have chose this one as your favorite, and that is all that really counts.
Keep up the great work!
Disclaimer:
Bear in mind that I am here to learn, just as many others and any comments that I have made are not intended to be offensive in any way, and are only constructive criticisms. If you wish to comment or discuss this critique please feel free to do so at any time.
Thank you,
Dick Pattee (Autool)
Autool@attbi.com
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06/24/2003 04:26:18 AM |
| Great concept!!! My one nitpick is the burn out was a little overdone for my taste. Too much detail lost. Still a wonderful shot... |
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06/23/2003 07:06:09 AM |
overexposed would be an understantement. I am guessing it is by design?
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06/23/2003 05:21:58 AM |
| A little too high key for my tastes. Most of the features and bones of the face should be distinguishable in the dad. This bright makes them invisible. |
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06/23/2003 01:07:59 AM |
| It's trying to be different, but I really don't like the contrast on this photo. |
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06/21/2003 11:18:57 PM |
| too bright and overexposed |
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06/21/2003 09:15:46 PM |
| I like the way the over-exposure makes this one look like a sketch, as much as a photo. What a lovely moment to capture for this challenge. |
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06/21/2003 12:19:46 AM |
| very white. I'd like too see better lighting on you |
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06/20/2003 10:31:20 PM |
| I think this would have made a nice high contrast shot - but as it is, I can't help but feel its a little too high. Nicely composed though |
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06/20/2003 03:52:18 AM |
| i like the high-key approach, but think you may have overdone it (I'm guilty of this all the time). I lose parts of that sweet little pumpkin's face inthe flare. beautiful composition; drop the contrast as soon as the competition is done and get a frame on it. |
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06/19/2003 11:26:52 PM |
| the high key really works here. this is a beautiful portrait.. but it is not really a self portrait. I see what you are trying to do, but it ends up being a portrait of the baby, as the attention is brought there by your eye direction, and by the baby's eye direction to the camera. This photo is a treasure. don't get me wrong. |
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06/19/2003 03:36:25 PM |
| I like the dreaminess of the high contrast, and the title says it all. My gripe here is that it is to me much more a shot of "Version 2" than the original, and therefore less a self-portrait than it would be if the camera was facing you instead. |
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06/19/2003 01:10:10 PM |
| This picture has a wonderful essence. The white-out efect is perfect. If it wasn't for the over-sharpening, it would be one of my favourites. The over sharpening distorts important parts of the image, like the eyelashes and eyebrows. I give you a 6. |
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06/19/2003 12:10:47 PM |
| Very high key and interesting. |
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06/19/2003 12:06:03 PM |
| I love the poses and the high key image, although I think it may be just a tad too bright, especially on your cheek. The way your hair merges with that of the baby's gives a unifying effect which is also very pleasing. Adorable shot. |
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06/19/2003 11:47:45 AM |
| my eyes, my eyes too bright 8 |
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06/18/2003 09:22:47 PM |
| very cute. Very appropriate use of high key too ... brings out the softness of the baby. Good job. Jacko. 10 |
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06/18/2003 08:17:55 PM |
| The photo is too bright, but the baby is adorable and the way you are looking at it is great. It's got the aww factor going for it. 7 just because its too bright..sorry. |
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06/18/2003 05:01:03 PM |
| I think this would have been great if the contrast hadn't been upped - would love to see the original - 7 |
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06/18/2003 12:29:03 PM |
| Oh, I like this! I wish I could see a bit more detail though. |
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06/18/2003 12:13:23 PM |
| so cute.. =) but too much contrast.. |
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