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05/09/2005 01:36:07 PM |
Thanks a lot again to every body on the comments and especially to all I learned about photography.
Thanks to Zagam for the apraissals and be sure I did learn a lot.
Please see my new shot of the same Bulova I put on my porfolio where I did try to get all the suggestions.
The light came from the sun light and I shooted at 10:20 am. Camera was automatically way.
THANKS AGAIN
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05/08/2005 10:24:08 PM |
Greetings from the Critique Club.
Thank you for entering the DPChallenge, Jewelry Advertisment.
Great capture. The choice of the watch and the rock creates a great appeal for your product. The light and dark tones also create an atmosphere of interest and uniqueness. The darker area's was a great place to the place the text. The entire photo scene almost feels like its near the beach, or a body of water. Your use of the frame and space, to position your watch is good. Your typeface, or font selection also gives the product a lot of class and value.
You have done an excellent job composing and photographing this ad.
Technically there are only some minor comments to make. One is the focal point of the watch. There is some blurrness in the center of the watch. The brand name "Bulova" is not "camera ready" sharp. The product name should be as clear as possible. Also the calendar date feature is also out of focus. There is a minor distraction on the left side of the watch face. Sort of a green color cast. This takes away from the silver coloring/material of the watch. There is also a shadow on the upper half of the watch's face which creates some distraction.
I am sure that you have notice newspaper and magazine watch ads. They set the watch to 10:10. The reason is be able to showcase all of the watch's features at a glance.
Like I said your typeface is an excellent choice. The title however probably does not need a ..! at the end. Bulova watches are very classic, elegant, and have very traditional style. The exclamation point is a cause for uneeded attention. Probably just ending it with three ... dots, would have suffice. You might get a difference of opinion here, but that is generally the advertising and marketing approach.
Just curious did you use a flash? Looking at the shutter speed of 1/500, I was wondering what light source you used?
Overall an excellent and well composed shot for the challenge.
Good luck in your next DPChallenge. Zagman.
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05/02/2005 12:20:06 AM |
Thank you very much to Daniel Cuesta, Michael Jewell, Nathan Pert, Paul Marcus, Catherine Balck, Nick clark. LPSNZ, Sonja Foos, Robert Mann, Michael Price, David Robinson, Martin Smith, Darren Coleman, Benjamin Cox, Nuno Monteiro, Roberto Garcia, Andrea Allen, Rob Go, Barry Baugher, Sam Northrop, B.C. Cutre, Nick Monu, Stephen Brubaker, Dexter Balyeat, Scott McAndrew, Joey Bramlage, Shari Malin, Sandy Powers, Lesley goodman, John Smith, Brad Petersen, Sally Phillips, Christina A, Teresa M, Louise Brien, Charles Cook, Yvonne Vetrone, Alyssa plano, Danetta doncel, Francois Plouffe, Steve Weaver, Rachel Dye, Sonya Thompson, Srdan Zirojevic, Todd, Tim Cady and tree Hidden people, who wrote comments on my picture “Bulota for ever..!” in Jewelry Advertisement Challenge. I do appreciate all recomendations and really did learn about shadows and ligthing.
To get 47 comments and suggestions from all of you in my picture is for me more than to get a ribbon. Thanks again and I fell this time was a school in my introduction into the photography world.
As soon I saw the shadow in the top of the front clock and the focus a bit out, it was a challenge fot me to get a better shot; and here is the result. What do you thing?
THANKS TO EVERY BODY
JoaquÃn RodrÃguez
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05/01/2005 11:24:20 PM |
| High Quality-- Nice Job on this Challenge-- 9 |
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05/01/2005 07:21:39 PM |
| very nice presentation. Tighter focus on the face would have yielded top rate. Bumping up on very good effort. |
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05/01/2005 05:27:20 PM |
| The numbers are a tinyy bit fuzzy, could be the small dimensions though. Also the shadow on the top of the face is a bit distracting. |
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05/01/2005 12:11:44 PM |
| Maybe move the light a little so that it gets rid of the foreshadow under the watch. |
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04/30/2005 09:56:22 PM |
| Nice idea, but there are too many shadows that are distracting. |
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04/30/2005 09:48:05 PM |
| Good use of lighting to leave space for the text. |
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04/30/2005 02:59:20 PM |
| Great setting and composition, unfortunately the shadow over the face of the watch really detracts from this image |
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04/30/2005 02:16:48 AM |
| good shot Btw the hands look better if set at 10 to 2. 8 |
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04/30/2005 12:02:54 AM |
| Nice set up. I like the rocks and focus. Good luck. |
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04/29/2005 10:12:04 PM |
| Perfect font for a Bulova ad. Not sure of th image composition though it works for the add. |
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04/29/2005 07:47:12 PM |
| 10 to 2 position would really help the face to break this up and proportion it somewhat better. like the element with the rock as it tones up the watch but an overall lack of focus on the hands and brand name of the time peice itself spoils thi sa little but a great image none the less. |
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04/29/2005 11:14:09 AM |
| Lighting problems. Location of light doesn't highlight in a natural way the glory of this timepiece. Timeless lighting is a bugger I'll admit. Great setting. I love the contrast of rock and watch. |
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04/29/2005 09:48:50 AM |
| very nice, especially with the greenish reflection on the left of the watch |
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04/29/2005 08:04:05 AM |
| good but the strap coming up at the back is too distracting especially as it is casting a shadow on the watch face |
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04/29/2005 07:13:19 AM |
| I wish the lighting had been more on the watch face. I like the setting of the shot. I like the dof used. maybe a smaller pen light pointing up or a larger light to the left with some paper in front to prevent glare. 8 |
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04/29/2005 06:51:01 AM |
| Very good. Love the reflectiion in the watch |
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04/29/2005 01:59:13 AM |
I like your idea. Reflections and setup really add to the shot. Your light source could be diffused so it won't cast so hard shadows.
Congratulations!
Message edited by author 2005-05-02 10:51:32. |
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04/28/2005 05:02:51 PM |
| Excellent apart from the shadow on the face. |
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04/28/2005 04:11:52 PM |
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04/28/2005 02:04:22 PM |
| Better focus on the watch face would be more effective, imho. but nice layout. 7 |
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04/28/2005 10:01:47 AM |
| Cool props - I like the rock. Lighting is ok. Focus on the watch seems off a bit. What is that reflection on the left side of the watch? Looks like sunglasses. ;^) Good luck. |
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04/27/2005 09:35:10 PM |
| pretty. Odd green reflection on the left side of the watch. A plant? |
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04/27/2005 01:07:56 PM |
| face of the watch is not sharp enough to sell. I can barely make out the Bulova name. The centering effect comes off as slightly offcenter. |
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04/27/2005 01:00:51 PM |
| the face of the watch could be a bit sharper but other than that well done! |
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04/26/2005 08:49:59 PM |
| Nice idea comparing a watch to a rock. Beautifully photographed. Quibbles: I'm wondering if it should not be 'forever' and if the balance would be just a bit better if the font face for this word were just a smidge smaller. Finally, I kind of like those dots, but wonder if the exclamation weakens the claim by cheapening it. |
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04/26/2005 06:57:58 PM |
| Wow! very nice. Attention to detail as I believe that you've found the "official Bulova Font" Nice comp and clarity. One small revision i'd suggest is the text on the bottom needs to be larger, capitalized and one word! |
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04/26/2005 05:35:10 PM |
| Is the face two tone or is that a shadow? Its looking like a shadow to me, but Bulova should make a two tone. |
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04/26/2005 05:20:23 PM |
| Good content, would have liked no shadow on the dial. |
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04/26/2005 02:48:58 PM |
| nice focus, but shadow on the watch face is distracting |
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04/26/2005 01:53:07 PM |
| Interesting compositiong. I would love to see it without the shadow in the upper portion of the face. |
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04/26/2005 12:19:35 PM |
| Very professional!!!!! This looks every bit like the high dollar ads I see in magazines. |
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04/26/2005 06:58:50 AM |
| i have one of those on my wish list |
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04/25/2005 09:38:10 PM |
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04/25/2005 08:48:30 PM |
Well thought-out composition.
A couple of things I see that could have been improved:
The upper part of the band is casting a shadow on the watch face and the lower text size is a bit too large in my opinion.
Good submission regardless. |
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04/25/2005 05:24:52 PM |
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04/25/2005 03:16:35 PM |
| Nice clear image. good job. |
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04/25/2005 01:59:50 PM |
| I could definitely see this in a print ad. Nicely done. 9 |
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04/25/2005 12:56:01 PM |
| Beautiful picture, but not totally on focus and there's a bad green reflection of the left side .... |
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04/25/2005 11:36:21 AM |
| Nice detail in the rock. I liked the photo overall and gave it a 7. |
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04/25/2005 10:30:31 AM |
| I like this! Awesome job! |
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04/25/2005 10:29:44 AM |
| Don't care for the shadow on the watch face |
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04/25/2005 10:13:13 AM |
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04/25/2005 09:11:40 AM |
| Should have tried to remove the shadow casted by the wrist band on the upper elst of the dial. Also, a bit anoying green reflection on the left side. |
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04/25/2005 04:29:16 AM |
| Nice composition, would have been a top image had the watch face been in sharp focus. 7 |
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04/25/2005 03:09:31 AM |
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04/25/2005 02:45:14 AM |
| where top of watch lays flat and has shadow..raise it up and have light to ENTIRE face of watch...nice shot...8 |
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04/25/2005 02:16:51 AM |
There should not have been a shadow over the face of the watch.
having the time set to 10:10 would have helped (as it is a de facto standard for watch ads but haven't impacted my score at all). |
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04/25/2005 12:31:53 AM |
| If the watch face was shadow free, this would be a 10! Nonetheless - great job. |
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