Their seems to be quite a few of you from the same school. Was this a school project? I wonder what the details of the project were. Only because they aren't really in the style of Natsumi Hayashi.
OK, some tips for next time, try to bounce your on-camera flash off of a wall or the ceiling, this will soften your shadows. be more aware of your background and choose one without distracting features in it. Try to use a faster shutter speed to remove any motion blur, and finally use the rule of thirds when possible.
Good luck! |