Wish you were here
by Delta_6

Comment:
Greetings from the Critique Club :)

I like this photo. Let me first make note of the things I think you did well:

Composition

The main subject seems well placed on the thirds line as does the horizon. Thank you for straightening the horizon. Your photo leads me from the mouth of the bottle, down the model's leg and to the beach and ocean. I feel like I AM the person in the photo. The diagonal line of the body works well across the image.

Focus

Good DOF. F22 kept the foreground and the background nicely in focus. You did well with this.

Tone

The skin tone is acceptable. The blue of the ocean and sky seem accurate.

So why didn't this score higher? It is lacking some 'pop'.

I would start with the lighting. It is very flat. Not much you can do mid-day at the beach. The obvious thing would be to wait until sunset and grab the drama created by a low, warm sun. Your colors would change and the shadows would add depth and emotion.

The sand is very flat, again because of the lighting and it detracts from the image. Regarding composition, I think the 6 pack detracts. The main subjects are the bottle, and the body leading me to the water and sky. The six pack, while adding to the story line, adds a distracting additional theme. Removing it could simplify the image and make it stronger.

It appears to me that the bottle opening is the primary subject, but it is in a shadow and the hand actually dominates that part of the image. Making the bottle neck and mouth 'pop' could help as well as allowing them to anchor the picture. Dodge and burn, curves?

Shooting at sunset would have made this an entirely differnt image, not for the sunset itself, but for the depth that the shadows would add.

Good shot for this challenge. I think you made more effort to meet the challenge than many entrants.

Please feel free to contact me via the PM system.

Ken
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In The Raging Tempest
by Rosacalaca

Comment:
Greetings from the Critique Club

I love the luminance in the photo. There is some real potential in this photo. Given that this was an advanced editing challenge you could have made this image pop.

First, the horizon is crooked. Second, the image is begging for some post processing using levels and curves. It appears to me that the main subject is the light streaming/streaking through the clouds, but that there is not enough contrast to make that light really work as well as it could. You could really make those streaks stand out. That is where the drama is in this photo. Contrast, some dodge and burn, etc.

The trees make a great frame for the scene, but perhaps you could use less of them. A tighter crop would focus the eye more on the drama of the storm. There seems to be a secondary theme happening in the foreground, but there is no shadow detail to support it. I think you could remove much of the lower foreground and get a stronger image.

Good image for straight from the camera, but in an advanced editing challenge voters are expecting a cleaned up, straightened image with some drama.

If you have any questions feel free to PM me.

Ken
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On the Urchin Diet
by RulerZigzag

Comment:
Welcome from the Critique Club

Composition

The first thing I notice is that the image appears crooked. Some cropping would help. The large amount of black with no shadow detail detracts from this photo. The place setting is off balance with the bowl causing the centered image to be off balance. Cutting the face off just below the nose bothers me.

Focus and Lighting

The low light made this a difficult shot seeing that you needed 3 seconds to expose the image. Some lighting would really help this shot. The face is not clearly in focus and the long exposure probably did not help. The only part of this image that appears to be in focus is the bowl and that is not the main subject.

Post Processing

A few things that could help this image: It needs a well-lit, sharply rendered main subject. The urchin is trying to be that. You could burn and dodge the urchin, and selectively sharpen it to make it really pop out.

For advanced editing you should try to clean up unwanted smudges and distracting backgrounds. There is something going on on the right edge that could be cloned out.

Overall the image appears too dark. If it does not appear dark to you, then check your monitor calibration. For a long while I ran my monitor too bright and discovered that all of my photos that I thought were bright and cheery were displaying too dark on other people's, properly calibrated monitors.

If you have any questions please feel free to use the PM system

Ken

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Where the Path Meets the Fog
by arron_christensen

Comment:
Greetings from the Critique Club

I am honored to be able to critique this image.

Composition

First impression is that this is a very successful photo. It conveys a simple message immediately. I won't comment on the appropriateness to the challenge since it was effectively a free-study. Excellent position of both the foreground tree on the thirds line and the row of trees fading into the fog on another thirds line. The leading lines pull my eye through the image very gently and very sucessfully. The darker foreground tree anchors the image very well allowing the eye to dance through the row of trees into nowhere.

Tone

Great tonal range. The contrast and tone of the foreground tree works very well in relation to the fog bound row of trees and background. Good work with levels and curves in not blowing out the fog and background and also preserving the detail in the shadows.

Focus

I might like the foreground tree to be a bit sharper and to show more detail. I imagine the full resolution image does much better in this area. 640x does not help in this area.

If I were to...

If I were editing this, I would experiment with cropping or removing the tree on the far right. It does detract a little bit from the leading lines. By removing it you leave only two main sets of objects that play off each other. This tree on the far right competes a little bit for my attention, detracting from the main interplay between foreground and background. It is a third player.

Last comment on this excellent image is that I am not sure that the relatively strong borders help the image. I am a fan of very thin, subtle borders. I think the strong black and white borders compete too much with the image and possibly a gray border may allow the image to speak on its own. There are no strong blacks or whites in the photo so the border may be a bit too strong.

Great photo. You just missed top 10.

If you have any questions please feel free to contact me via the PM system.

Ken

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Nude Modeling - What book can teach you that?
by btrinh

Comment:
Welcome from the Critique Club :)

Concept

I cannot say that this really fits the challenge. Even the long title does not really successfully shoe horn it in.

First Impressions

My very first impression is 'I wish I could see the model better'. I fell like I am in a dimly lit room at dusk and everything is murky. I think there is much potential to this image, but it seems lost in the low-lit, noisy image. Her skin tone appears to be lost amongst the image noise. It cries out for contrast and sharper focus.

Composition

The pose is interesting, but perhaps the focal length seems to magnify the model's butt a bit. There is a drama and movement to the pose which I like.

Color

The color balance is interesting but in combination with the lack of image sharpness seems to detract from the model's skin tone.

I think this image has potential, but I am having a hard time getting past the image noise and lack of sharpness to fall in love with this one. I keep wanting to see it in black white with enough contrast so I do not have to work so hard to appreciate what I am looking at.

If you have any questions, please feel free to use the PM system to contact me.

Ken

To study the light of the old masters
by Rino63

Comment:
Welcome from the Critique Club

Composition

The first thing I notice is that most of this photo is another piece of art. I think that must have effected the scoring. I like the position of the magnifying glass in relationship to the man's eye. The line between the eye and the middle of the glass draws me through the image. And the partial inclusion of the woman's face is nice as well.

The hand seems to detract from an otherwise interesting photo. The white balance for the skintone appears off as well. It seems that keeping the hand out of the photo might have helped it considerably.

I did not realize it was a magnifying glass at first. I think because the glass goes almost border to border, it does not makes itself clear. I think I would have positioned it so it was smaller relative to the overall image so it popped out more.

Focus

It is not clear that the magnifying glass has any dramatic impact on the viewer's view of the painting, so perhaps using a more dramatic shallow depth of field would have achieved that effect better, by allowing the background to blur and the image within the circle to be sharply in focus. F10 is going to keep alot in focus including background. I really want the glass to change my view of the painting, but the focus and magnification within the glass area is not much different than that of the background. Also, the actual frame of the glass is not in focus either. With basic editing you have to rely on the right DOF to achieve these effects and perhaps more attention in that area would have helped this image communicate stronger.

Summary

Basically this is an interesting interpretation of the challenge. If I could change just one thing, it would be to get that hand out of the image. If I could change a second thing it would be to change the focus and DOF to add drama and pop.

If you have any questions please feel free to contact me via the PM system.

Ken

Golden Glow
by Graeme44

Comment:
Very nice. Good lighting and composition.

Bethany - The Goddaughter
by Saswaa

Comment:
Nice portrait. Begging for some contrast.

Mr. Bonsai my Room Mate :)
by Krisby

Comment:
Very nice. The white border is a bit heavy for the subtle image, but I like the composition and lighting. The composition gives this great tension with the negative space. Well done.

Ceci n'est pas une lune
by Camabs

Comment:
Yes! There is this tension where I want the orange to move, but it doesn't. The use of negative space is very well done. The relationship of the orange to the black space is powerful. The simplicity of this image works very well. This is what photography is all about.