Lonely Pregnant Woman on Swing
by StevePax

Comment by Alexys:
Good image... it gives a mix sensation between calm and motion. Yeah.

Lonely Pregnant Woman on Swing
by StevePax

Comment by justine:
Maybe if you had been closer to her? I don't really find this shot bad but at the same time it's just not interesting.

Lonely Pregnant Woman on Swing
by StevePax

Comment by jmsetzler:
Hi steve :)

What Time Is It?
by StevePax

Comment by Harz_Joerg:
Greetings from the Critique Club

Initial thoughts/My opinion
Not very special, just another jewellery image, why is there so much space on the upper left. What happens to the glass of the watch, seems turbid.

Content/Composition
Presenting jewellery in a macro challenge is a good idea, while not new. The watch you selected looks fine to me: not very shinny and new, one sees that it has been used for some time. The chain segments are solid made and strong, that's also good in my opinion.
Placing it on a white surface is also fine: very neutral. And you managed it to make it pure white: thumb up for that. Also the shadow of the watch is well made: no harsh and sharp edges and also the shadow is not too dark.
This part shows the effort you put into the image!

In your composition the element of negative space is a bit too much: to me there is no need for having it. Also the watch is reduced to a 2-dimensional object (only the shadow give some depth). Of course a watch is more or less 2D, that's why they are most times shown rolled up, thus giving some volume, or by using a lower angle of view.
The watch is to me not too appealing because of the turbid glass: can't tell if its an artefact of the image or the glass itself. Also the overexposed reflections are too much: some bright spots are fine to make an object look shiny, but here there are too large sections overexposed.

One personal suggestion: because the watch isn't brand new, you could have gone much closer and try to work out the signs of usage. Together with an appropriate title this would have scored probably higher. Your technical skills for sure are great.

Camera work -technically
Could be a little sharper, but overall fine. Beside the reflections, exposure is good too.

Digital Processing - Technical
You could have increased the contrast a little bit to make the image more dynamic. Also a little more sharpening would have helped in the same direction

Fits the challenge
Of course it does!


Good luck for you further submissions!

What Time Is It?
by StevePax

Comment by Imagineer:
While crisply focused it is too far back from the watch face. This shot also suffers from harsh lighting and unaesthetic composition, since the space top left is not functional in any way to the shot.

What Time Is It?
by StevePax

Comment by jenesis:
I like the placement of the watch but the brightness on the upper right of the face is a little distracting.

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by StevePax

Comment by Frankie_Lv:
Steve,
The B&W works well here. But from a compositional stand point it could have been vastly improved by simply having the young lady turn her head more to the camera. If you look at her head you have very nice detail along the hair line, her browe & eye lashes. The water on her face shows very nice detail also. As we move to the right however you begin to lose all detail of the hair to the point that it is a black blouch. You also begin to lose detail in the water the futher down and right you go the worse it gets to a point that it looks like your lense is dirty ( see the white spotting pattern of the water ). By turning her head more to the camera this problem could have been avoided. The water, slowing down the shutter speed would have given the water a sence of motion giving the photo a sence of life. This photo looks a little flat because of the (freeze frame) stopping the water. The piece of teflon tape on the shower head is a bit distracting also. If possible try shooting that same shot giving the water a sence of motion and using the strong details of the eyes,browse, and hair line and you will see a huge difference.

What Time Is It?
by StevePax

Comment by ahaze:
Technical: fits the challenge. Exposure composition focus lighting all good, I love the placement of the watch in the frame.

Personal: the light seems a little bright on the metal around the face. Otherwise I like it!

My vote: 6

2 Racing Commuters
by StevePax

Comment by Grandmom:
Great idea and great angle. I like this very much for this challenge. 9

2 Racing Commuters
by StevePax

Comment by LoudDog:
Crop out more of the sky and the picture iss much better. The big empty white spot pulls too much attention.