Kay and Azaleasby
noranekoComment by karmat: CRITIQUE CLUB CRITIQUE
by karmat
Compositionally, this is well done. The subject is clearly defined and is close enough to allow us to see her features, but still allows some context in the surroundings.
Technically, it is also a sound picture. The focus is good, and the out of focus azaleas gives a nice background. The brightness on her left/our right is a bit distracting, and gives it an over exposed look, but it also helps to show that it is a natural light, as well.
So, technically, it is well done. What it lacks is a certain "oomph" that helps to make the viewer want to stay longer and view the picture more. This shot simply isn't compelling enough to do that. Having said that, I fully recognize that I'm no expert in this area, but I'm wondering about a couple of things that would have made it more interesting.
Where she is looking -- By not looking into the camera, the viewer lacks that basic connection with the subject. I know that not all good portraits *have* to have that, but I think with this one, it may have helped a bit.
Her personality -- She has a typical "I'm posing to be nice" kind of grin on her face, and this takes over what looks like could be a playful look in her eyes. I know it would change the "atmosphere" of the shot all together, because the flowers set up a "happy" feeling, but I'm wondering what would happen with a serious, even concerned/worried, look on her face. OR a big ole' wink.
Again, this shot is one that you could proudly frame and give to her, but to be judged against over 200 other portraits it really needed *something* to make it stand out.
Good work.
Please feel free to contact me if I need to clarify or further explain anything.
karmat