Another Girl
by Shea927

Comment by fotomann_forever:
::: Greetings from Critique Club :::

Hi, as requested, here is an indepth critique of your submission.

First Impression - the most important one:
Comes across as being a processed snapshot to me. Title seems to shoehorn the photo into the challenge.

Composition:
It's ok for a portrait. But it lacks any real pop to make it artistically sound. Also, the unmanaged hair isn't framing the face well.

Subject:
Clear and stands out well from the background.

Technical (Color, focus, and light):
Color: The B&W treatment is a bit flat. A curves adjustment to add more midtone contrast would help quite a bit.
Focus: sharp, looks nice.
Light: A little flat, also there is a hot spot on the end of her nose and above her eye that are a bit distracting.

To grow its vote?:
Lucky kinda summed up what most voters probably thought when voting. Overall, it comes across as a snapshot.

Summary:
Nice photo of your friend, I'm sure she will like it. And, it's a keeper for that reason. It just didn't work well for this challenge.

Hope to see more from you soon,
Leroy

Droplets
by Shea927

Comment by sherpet:
I like the water droplets on the leaves.....

Another Girl
by Shea927

Comment by Lucky:
Somewhat dull...both in contrast and composition

Shopping Carts
by Shea927

Comment by whiteroom:
great idea, i always look at these little buggers and wonder how
to photography them. lets have a shopping trolley challenge!

Shopping Carts
by Shea927

Comment by FocusPoint:
I like this... Very good shot :)

Failure to Put Out Fire
by Shea927

Comment by DrAchoo:
I think the window, while acting as a natural frame, is very harsh. It also is crooked which distracts a bit. It looks like it's a result of your perspective though and not holding the camera crooked. Nevertheless, people hate angled lines near the edge of the frame. The inside is interesting, but also lacks any specific subject. Our eye wanders around trying to latch onto something. We are constantly drawn to the white frame which keeps us from finding a subject even more. The two things my eye is drawn to is the foam (not too appealing) and the diagonal slats (but I don't know what they are because it's too dark).

Another Girl
by Shea927

Comment by BrianR:
She's sweeter that all the girls and I've met quite a few
Nobody in all the world can do what she can do
And so I'm telling you this time you'd better stop
For I have got another girl

Like the expression for the lyrics....7

Failure to Put Out Fire
by Shea927

Comment by MTPixels:
Nice title and composition. I would like to see this in color. Perhaps the charred wood would stand out more in contrast to some colors.

Failure to Put Out Fire
by Shea927

Comment by ericwoo:
Your title choice pulls this one down a bit. I normally ignore titles, but I read this one since it wasn't immediately obvious what it was. It pulls it down since the fire is indeed out, it was just extinguished a lot too late. Nice idea, but the darkness of the charred interior makes is difficult to understand.

Failure to Put Out Fire
by Shea927

Comment by kenskid:
but isn't the fire out?