In The Year 2003by
TarbiniComment by inspzil: Greetings from the Critique Club
By Inspzil
Sorry Tarbini, you get stuck with me again.
Composition - This totally reminds me of some propaganda ad (made up of course) by some extremist group who thinks the internet is the governments way of watching us. This is the eye of "big brother". It doesn't really do a lot for me in terms of visual impact or have any real highly emotive factors either. It looks like a bespeckled eye. Its pretty centered which isn't bad. I'm not sure adjusting the framing wouldn't help add a more mysterious tone to this photo or not. Just thinking "out loud" so to speak. It's hard to tell what you were going for here exactly, if there is anything you were specifically trying to do.
Technical - A little soft, but not unbearable. How about "tolerably soft"? People on the whole are not really meant to be super crisp all the time. Most of my shots I soften up with autofx dreamy photo or whatever that free plugin is called. This is no exception, even as a macro. The lighting is great, especially with no glares. Amazing. But judging by the shutter speed and aperture, you were probably working with existing light. Whatever you did to reduce the noise, it worked great. As for the border, in this kind of shot its warranted. It might be a little thick for my tastes, but I think you made the right choice.
Overall - Not a bad shot, but one that lacks something extra to grab the voters. This really isn't enough to make them even real curious. Executed pretty well but now wow'ing the average voters. You do nice work Tarbini, but this wasn't one of your greatest. There's always next time. I think a change in the lighting would've been the best thing to try to improve this. Its kind of flat (I just thought of this if you are wondering why its dead last). Good Luck with your future submissions. - Bob
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