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posthumousComment by KaDi: Greetings from the Critique Club. The following comments are in response to your request for a critique on your challenge submission. Please feel free to send me a PM concerning my comments.
This image got a chuckle from me when I saw it in the challenge because I enjoy word play. My second thought, however, was that this is not a wall that can be climbed over... For me, this would have had a stronger connection with the challenge if it also portrayed an escape...if, for example, there was a wall (or fence) with a shread of clothing on it suggesting that someone had actually gone without permission...it would have a double meaning and second connection to the challenge.
The composition has an interesting graphic quality. I like to see this sort of play with lines and shapes. The falling snow gives it some dimension. However, because the white at the top of the frame has no definition, it is not clear at first if that is blown out sky or snow on a roof. It is only because I know this type of metal garage that I can deduce it is a roof. The line of the roof edge has creates an interesting pattern but I don't see the purpose in including much more than a sliver of the white above the edge. The lightness of that large white area pulls the eye away from the more interesting shapes and textures below.
I feel this lacks a true center of interest. The pattern is interesting but not strong enough to keep me looking for long. As a whole it has abstract interest in passing but nothing that really holds me there. The element that piques my curiosity most is the dents near the door...but that doesn't seem to be part of the story here.
Stronger lighting (nearly impossible during a snow storm) would have heighted the relief in the textures of the structure. Because this
is taken during a snow fall, I have to ask what does the snow add? Would you know it as snow if you had never seen snow fall beside a red barn?
Overall, I'm left with the impression that the only reason for the image is the challenge. I think it needed something more to carry the viewer toward seeing what you were seeing. Out of the box? Yes. Creative thinking is good excercise in these challenges, isn't it.
Hope you don't find my comments too harsh.
Keep creating!
--Kadi
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