Wish you were here
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Comment by alexzen:
Greetings from the Critique Club :)

I like this photo. Let me first make note of the things I think you did well:

Composition

The main subject seems well placed on the thirds line as does the horizon. Thank you for straightening the horizon. Your photo leads me from the mouth of the bottle, down the model's leg and to the beach and ocean. I feel like I AM the person in the photo. The diagonal line of the body works well across the image.

Focus

Good DOF. F22 kept the foreground and the background nicely in focus. You did well with this.

Tone

The skin tone is acceptable. The blue of the ocean and sky seem accurate.

So why didn't this score higher? It is lacking some 'pop'.

I would start with the lighting. It is very flat. Not much you can do mid-day at the beach. The obvious thing would be to wait until sunset and grab the drama created by a low, warm sun. Your colors would change and the shadows would add depth and emotion.

The sand is very flat, again because of the lighting and it detracts from the image. Regarding composition, I think the 6 pack detracts. The main subjects are the bottle, and the body leading me to the water and sky. The six pack, while adding to the story line, adds a distracting additional theme. Removing it could simplify the image and make it stronger.

It appears to me that the bottle opening is the primary subject, but it is in a shadow and the hand actually dominates that part of the image. Making the bottle neck and mouth 'pop' could help as well as allowing them to anchor the picture. Dodge and burn, curves?

Shooting at sunset would have made this an entirely differnt image, not for the sunset itself, but for the depth that the shadows would add.

Good shot for this challenge. I think you made more effort to meet the challenge than many entrants.

Please feel free to contact me via the PM system.

Ken
alexzen

Wish you were here
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Comment by david_c:
Yeah, me too.

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Comment by PHOTOKID:
great perspective shot, really wish I were here right now. nice colors and tones.

Taking flight
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Comment by rcpmac:

Originally posted by Mydee1: The sky is totally creepy but it's part of what keeps my attention.

The sky??? That would be water.
Wonderful "muscular' capture of this bird.

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Comment by Pedxer:
Nice picture, very relaxing and good take on the original. No lawsuits from Corona yet?

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Comment by spencerwood:
Nice idea, its just lacking something extra for me but I can't qute point out what. Your using the full tonal range, well composed (rule of thirds on the bottle and horizon), its a decent enough entry, I just can't see it reaching the top ten

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Comment by LeeD:
Interesting concept but the execution is lacking

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Comment by bmartuch:
Good job on the idea and great execution.

Taking flight
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Comment by NikonJeb:
Nice capture! Beautiful raptor! Underrated, IMO.

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Comment by nomad469:
nice pov image