No entry- God's Playground
by smyk

Comment by Man_Called_Horse:
This would of been a great image if you had just the building. Framing out the sign, and the sky would of given a better impression of what you were after. As it is, I know which way is up, therefor all i see is a picture the wrong way.

Nice lighting, great texture, good color, great lines, sign distracting

No entry- God's Playground
by smyk

Comment by dcano:
Love the architecture but I really dont like the sign. I also like that you turned the building on end like it was reaching to the sky.

No entry- God's Playground
by smyk

Comment by Artifacts:
The illusion of flowing lines would work better without the clouds and the sign giving away the perspective so abruptly.

No entry- God's Playground
by smyk

Comment by BrianR:
Clever rotation,really like in the normal poition.....5

No entry- God's Playground
by smyk

Comment by Rebecca:
I like this better in its more earthly portrait orientation.

Midas' Library
by smyk

Comment by kari1:
::: Critique Club :::

Hi, my name is Kari and from the critique club.

I am unsure why you have asked for a critique when you don't like what you did .. and only entered for in your words the sake of entering something. Oh well onwards and upwards I happen to like the pic.

First Impression - the most important one:
I love books and these old ones are interesting ... the mask in intriquing and adds intesting.

Composition:
this scene is a little too tightly croped for me ... I think that trying to hit the mask on the thirds vertically and horizontally would have worked better for the shot ... rather than dhaving his nose in the middle and making it a little centred.

Subject:
Meets the challenge ... I don't think you thought of the table surface .. the veneer doesn't work for this shot and covering it with fabric may have helped create an older feel which the books and mask do.

Technical (Colour and light):
The mask has a little too little light on the right side ... using something to reflect onto the side may have soften the image slightly.

To grow its vote?:
Think about all aspects .. the mask being on a piece of paper detracts a little, but having it on the table surface would have been worse ... you could have had it on one of the books and used that as the surface and also background.

Summary:
Just thoughts .. hope they help .. your portfolio is really good.

If you've got any questions about this critique, please feel free to contact me via the PM system.

Cheers

Kari

007
by smyk

Comment by Shermy:
dunn dun dun dun, dun dun dun, dunn du du dun, dun du dun, dunn dun dun dun, dun dun dun, dunn du du dun, dun du dun, du nu du na na.....:)

007
by smyk

Comment by szalona:
dont know that this fits the challenge.

Midas' Library
by smyk

Comment by Kivet:
weirdly interesting object there, i like how you captured the old look of the books

Midas' Library
by smyk

Comment by katswig:
Not enough detail in the mask, it looks rather like a gold blob, but the rest of the photo is great.