The Beehive Shape
by KiwiShotz

Comment by rachelellen:
What a dilemma. Go more panoramic and you have to lose height to meet the size requirement; a centered composition of this would be boring; and yet the way you've cut off the side makes it less visually startling as a shape. Still a very good image, and I think you chose the least of the three evils. (wish you'd left the tippy top intact, though.)

The Beehive Shape
by KiwiShotz

Comment by Shutterbug21:
WOW!

The Beehive Shape
by KiwiShotz

Comment by Jammur:
Interesting building, but I think the shape is subordinate to the pattern, at least in this image

The Beehive Shape
by KiwiShotz

Comment by ohthatguyagain:
Good shot, and great building, but you should shoot something even more abstract for a higher score. Good angle and clarity. Could use maybe a little more contrast work?

The Beehive Shape
by KiwiShotz

Comment by Pug-H:
I'm not sure that cropping off the top was a good idea.

The Beehive Shape
by KiwiShotz

Comment by photoneer:
Cutoff at the top ... too much crop

Cambo - US Open Champ
by KiwiShotz

Comment by JH:
Great shot - I agree with the cropping (to include traffic light etc.) And even better considering it was your first shot with a new camera.

Industrial Light
by KiwiShotz

Comment by amber:
Hi from the critique club!

This image fits the challenge well.

I love the grungy colour on the building; it matches its function, glowing in the night like a cottage fire.
There's a light on inside and I want to know who is in there and what they are doing.
The lattice work sits on top of the two eye-like windows like a quirky hat:)
I can imagine that from far away this strange, unnattractive building would look intriquing.
For me though, the tree at the bottom right keeps catching my eye and is distracting, but from your comments, it seems you had no choice about your point of view.
An interesting image, but not one with that 'wow' factor that we all strive fruitlessly for;)

Growing Pains
by KiwiShotz

Comment by mesmeraj:
Hey Brett
This is the CC paying you a visit.
Before i get into the image i have to say a HUGE thankyou to you for all the comments you have made in ratio to those you have recieved. Makes me embrassed to compare myself!

Growing Pains is a very apt title for this image. When we are young we dream of being older and being able to do whatever we want, and those growing pains sure do set in! The concept is good, i believe it popped into a lot of our heads whenthe challenge was annouced. I think it was scalvert that recently said when brainstorming for a challenge, he thinks of the obvious, and then wonders how to make it unique, and if other people would actually want to look at it. You had to share this concept with a number of other photogs in this challenge, which i believe affected your score - if you think this might be the case when you have an idea, Shannons advice to try and make a more unique take on an obvious concept.

I agree with the commentors that this image is a little two busy. However, everything here has a reason - tells part of the pains of adulthood, with the exception of the busniesscard holder/clock. The story would be as strong without these, and the image stronger.

Lighting needs a little work. It seems as though the lights might have been a little two low, and needed to shine down on the subject rather than shine beside it if that makes sense. The cup and the pills, near the light have tiny blow outs. The pen which is shielded from the light, is mostly lost in shadow. Sections on the bills also appear that with a little more light they would be crisper.
I ran across the same problem with the light not working on the calulator type screen in my own adult picture. I think what would have helped this would have been shooting the scene in a light tent to even out the light reflecting off the screen - but i am not sure. If you work it out, please share.

Overall, it is a good clean shot which it fit the challenge very well - but lacked the extra omph to take it beyond the mid fives. Don't be afraid to let your creativity run wild!
It you have any questions or would like to discuss the image further, please feel free to PM me.
Cheers
Elli

Industrial Light
by KiwiShotz

Comment by kari1:
Very lovely, I think it is somewhat famililar :)