Watching Mexico Independence Day Paradeby
JEMComment by Kavey: Critique Club
Initial thoughts
Sweet contents, composition weak.
Composition/ Content
The two little girls are attractive and the candid nature of the shot is appealing. It could be improved with eye contact though that would be difficult to achieve on a candid shot.
I like the way that the yellow colour is echoed in the clothing of both.
In terms of composition I’d rather have their feet/ arms included in shot – as it is the girl on the left is reaching out of shot – I want to see what she is reaching for.
The positioning of their faces within the frame is satisfactory and the line of the kerb balances this out in the lower third of the frame.
Background
The background is somewhat distracting – in particular I dislike the dark leg or pillar behind the girl at the right – it is not a good background for her dark hair colour and it means we lose the strong shape of her head. The other feet in the background are also messy. I do, of course, appreciate that this is only to be expected in a candid shot of this nature – I am expressing this only in terms of what would improve the shot further for me.
Camera Work - Technical
Focus seems a little soft in their faces though perhaps this is an issue of resolution, I am not sure. Colours and light have been captured well.
Fits The Challenge
Without the title it would be hard to relate this to any particular story and perhaps it would be worth exploring candid shots of the crowds which also include the parade. With the title this is certainly the kind of shot I could imagine in a local paper, in terms of content.
Your Opinion On The Photo
I find the image pleasant to look at but not to the extent of being drawn back again and again for further viewing.
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