Electric Dreams of a Passionate Motherby
LeeDComment by eschelar: I am commenting because you felt you didn't have enough constructive criticism. I am hardly a person with skill or experience, but if you can accept my opinions, I think I have found three things that are perhaps the reasons that people didn't like it. Knowing how it was done helps a lot in making this sort of comment.
I personally feel the picture is very interesting, very punchy, but a little lacking in basic appeal.
1. The lines - I saw three kinds of lines on her body. Straight-ish, hurried lines, Wild, passionate, electric lines with lots of squiggle and spark, resembling lightning (even the ones that were shorter still fall into this category for the erratic pattern) and finger smudges.
I found the finger smudges very appealing. They added greatly to the picture's content and meaning.
I felt the unstable lines (right leg, both sides of the belly and arms) added to the picture both in the sense of adding electricity and providing the setting for the passionate smudging on the breast
I felt the straightish lines looked hurried and didn't add much. The fact that they were quite prominent in the main focal areas (foreground leg, and most notably center belly) meant you had to look harder for the more complex and interesting lines. They weren't really terrible, so don't take that meaning, but perhaps just a little too straight.
Personally, I would guess that a few more smudges, sparingly added, particularly to break up the straighter lines, would have added a lot more tension and passion to this very good picture.
The C-section scar didn't need much explaining except that it was on such a trim woman. Post partum weight loss is your friend! I felt it added a lot to the picture. Having known a handful of women who were open about being uncomfortable about the way they looked to their SO's with that scar, I could see this as being a real expression of uninhibited passion.
2. The face - Burn tool? That would have taken some work because of the hair. Would it have been possible to mix some of her real hair in with the Pink hair? It looks like the pink hair really caught all that black light and brightened the face disproportionately. Another thing you might try is the black light paint in the hair in streaks instead of a wig? A little sensuous toussling of the hair with some paint and styling gel might reduce the light and reduce the straggly hairs.
3. The eye - there is something very sloppy about the appearance of the eye. It is a sensual picture overall, but the eye looks somewhat too young or too innocent? Perhaps a little more starkness, again, maybe burning?
Hope it's useful. Well done with the pic. I never would have taken anything like this. Both because of my limited skill with cameras and my limited skill with females :(.
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