Laser Lightby
ChasSourekComment by Bear_Music: *** CRITIQUE CLUB COMMENTS ***
Personally, I voted this a 7. I believe it was underrated by the voters. It was one of the netries that tried to literally "photograph light" and I appreciated the effort that went into it.
Let's talk about why I didn't gibe it a 10; that might be helpful.
1. On any image of this nature, sharpness is your friend. There's an overall sense of fuzziness to the image that is not doing it any favors. Now, I realize that it may very well be that within the limitations of your setup no greater sharpness was attainable; I don't honsetly know. But even if that is the case, to take the concept to the next level would involve finding a way to do the same thing more sharply. For example, perhaps the glass is an ordinary kitchen glass, and perhaps a crystal glass would have rendered the rim more sharply. Crystal is much more optically pure than ordinary domestic glass.
2. The composition itself is a little cut-and-dried. I'm not sure how you'd have framed this more dramatically, but the overall effect is surprisingly static considering how powerful the diagonal is.
3. The background is a little muddy, and this isn't helping either. could you have found a way to have the background far enough behind the glass that spillover from the laser wasn't affecting it at all?
These are my basic thoughts on this entry. It's a decent photo that has untapped potential in it. I'd like to see you work on this concept and produce a stronger variation of it, just to prove to yourself you can.
Robt.
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