My Mountainsby
AarthekComment by skief: Greetings from the Critique Club
Let me first of all echo the comment about the fabulous sky. The clouds and the sunset are just fabulous. Now with such a fabulous sky, why did your photo only score a 5.1872.
Let me try to point out a few things that give me a lower impression on this photo.
First: Sky. Now wait a minute, you just said the sky was fabulous. Let me amend that and say, most of the sky is fabulous. That clear section of blue sky at the top is so strong, that it detracts from those fabulous clouds and lighting. I would definitely crop that blue strip out from the top. This would remove that distraction and also reenforce the drama of the clouds and sun.
Second: Sky. Wait, that was first one. Many people say that they do not look at the title of the photo, but in truth we all let the title effect us. Your title of "My Mountains" is sort of deceptive, as when I am looking at the photo, I do not see much of the mountains. Now some of this is the size of the photo, some that the mountains are so dark and some because the clouds extend down into the mountains and is hard to see what is cloud and what is mountains. Instead of the mountains, my eyes are looking at the sky.
This also goes towards the challenge theme itself. This does not show much in the way of a distinctive that would enable us to say, yes, that is exactly what I think of when I think of Orem, Utah, or some other location. Instead it almost seems to be a generic (although pretty and dramatic) sunset/rise picture.
Possible solution: Tighter crop, cropping out the parts that are not important to the photo. This would be the top and some of the bottom to almost give it a panoramic feel. This would also put us closer to the mountains and enable us to see them just a little bit better. It would also get rid of the empty blue sky at the top and some of the empty black space at the bottom.
If you have any questions or comments about this critique, feel free to pm me.
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