Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by alexgurley:
thank you so much for the comments everyone! they're really helpful, especially from the critique club. i'll definitely keep everything in mind when i'm shooting the next challenge!

Originally posted by smardaz: i still really enjoy this, and yes you are improving, jump .75 of a point from your last entry!, im gonna fav this, i dig it

i'm really glad you like it, thanks for favoriting it!!

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by sfalice:
GREETINGS FROM THE CRITIQUE CLUB

welcome to DPC! Your second entry, and hey, you broke the 5 barrier. Not bad, Alex.

The glee, the exuberance, the sheer fun of this entry entranced our viewer/voters. You comments show this. If you two didn't collapse into a gaggle of giggles after the shoot, I would be surprised.

congratulations on getting your model in pretty good focus in mid-air. Not easy, my friend. Then, I suppose we have to discuss the surroundings. The hot spots, like the lamp & the bedding really have to be handled carefully to take this fun photo out of the snapshot category.

So, my thoughts on this would be to consider your surroundings with care, in this case perhaps remove the lamp from camera view & use dark foreground fabric.

You are telling a story in one photo.

I rather think you will be very good at it when you have a few more technicals under your belt so keep 'em coming.

I hope this little critique is helpful to you.

Alice

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by smardaz:
i still really enjoy this, and yes you are improving, jump .75 of a point from your last entry!, im gonna fav this, i dig it

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by bcenu:
The landing's gunna hurt!

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by ThingFish:
Cool action shot. Almost looks as if she is levitating. Unusual perspective. 5

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by kleski:
lighting makes this look like a snapshot

locked out
by alexgurley

Comment by spiritualspatula:
Hello from the Critique Club and welcome to the site!

It’s good that you’re considering the idea of cold as a whole and not just “lets take a photo of a pile of snow or an icecube,” but remember that voters are relatively direct in their interpretation of subject matter. I think this is part of what docked your score. Beyond this and in regard to technicals, you have good focus and your saturation is good, but there isn’t much color in your photo. Also, considering the pose you were in, I think it would definitely have been feasible to decrease your shutter speed to knock down your ISO, and all the noise with it (which is pretty apparent). Noisy photos are not always well received even if the noise is used appropriately with the subject matter and almost never if it doesn’t have some clear relationship. The doorway is also a bit skewed, and this could have been alleviated a bit by a more careful placement of the camera.
I agree with Yo_Spiff on his point as well- emphasizing the breath on the window would make for a closer relationship between Cold and your chosen subject matter by concentrating on the portion that is cold, and not the aspect that is locked out.
Try to also think about how you weren’t able to accomplish what you set out to- understanding how to achieve your vision is, after all, just as integral as having an interesting idea.
Keep at it, and I hope to see more of your photos in the future.

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by duartix:
Great shot, just needed a faster speed, there's some motion blur.

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by smardaz:
despite the snapshot look of this and the distracting b/g....i really love it! love the joyful look on the model, captures the exuberance of youth

Soaring
by alexgurley

Comment by MinsoPhoto:
Def meets the challenge. This is an interesting shot.