The Net
by MArteSi

Comment by jamesgoss:
Quite an interesting architecture. Nice shadow and tone. I find the lovely blues and greens in the lower left hand corner to be MUCH more interesting than the mostly straight architectural elements. It fits the challenge, but I don't feel a huge connection with the photograph. I don't know what it is, but it's missing that one OOMPH that would push it up. I'll come back again before the challenge is over. --Not Participating

The Net
by MArteSi

Comment by Ammie:
well done

The Net
by MArteSi

Comment by hernan43:
Nice abstract.

Hope Rising
by MArteSi

Comment by MArteSi:

Originally posted by docpjv: Testing-testing..

Dear Peter,

I was so happy of finding your critique! I really feel to thank you for the time and the attention you gave to my picture, and for your precious advises. I didn't know what a duo was! and thank to you, I just discovered lomography, or more precisely, I discovered the name of this kind of picture with that special atmosphere. Just had a little promenade through your pictures to know where the words I was reading came from, and I am honored someone like you took so much care to analyze my picture. You are right, I should improve my skills in post processing, pay more attention to little details, and be patient in obtaining or waiting for the best light I can get. Thank you so much.
There is something else I feel to say. Thank you for your kind promoting attitude, for expressing your appreciation for my eye and for the creative element of my pictures (this is such a beautiful compliment for me), and for encouraging me in doing more and better!
I guess you imagine how such a positive message can be encouraging for a beginner like me.

I hope I can discuss about photography with you in the future and ask you your opinion again.

Another thing. Io sono italiana :-) ! Sono in Belgio per lavoro! Ti ringrazio in italiano per la tua splendida critica e spero che le mie future fotografie ti piacciono. Grazie e a presto!

Ciao

Maria

Hope Rising
by MArteSi

Comment by docpjv:
Testing-testing..

Hope Rising
by MArteSi

Comment by docpjv:
GOOD DAY FROM YOUR DPCHALLENGE CRITIQUE CLUB!

Dear Maria, ,

Thanks for allowing us to have a closer look at your photograph. It is a fact that on average people look and evaluate an image presented to them in 5 seconds. When we are given the opportunity to really look and interpret the image, that is when we appreciate people like you. And thanks to you, we hope to learn much together.

The process I deploy is first of all to look at your previous work and then look at the currents comments made. I want to have a 'feel' for the person who entrusted me with this responsibility. Only then do I spend time with the image for a critique.

The critique can be both Applied (To the image self) and Theoretical (Attempt to philosophy and theorise about the work). It is important for me to be able to describe, to interpret, to evaluate and even to theorize about it. If I can encourage discourse about your work I will be happy.

In the final analysis, I hope you can learn something from this, take something of it and improve both your skill and self confidence.

So, here goes for your image.

First things first, you got only two comments and both of them are very good. Interesting is the one from Lydia Too. She is a gifted photographer and I am sure she was really impressed, as I too was. The other comment said you should win it. Very positive.

This is a very creative image, beautifully presented and a very good choice to have it in B&W. That is why most voters gave you a 6.

On composition I think if the eye in every image was on the top line of the Rules of Thirds lines, it would have been better. look at the bottom of the images, the dark sweater is taking up too much space.

There are elements of fine creativity in terms of your setup and the models' eye movement. Other than that, there is not enough creativity in the presentation of the face itself. Let me explain, if the face was post processed in grunge, more people would have given it a second look. That is what photography is all about, grabbing a second look, something exciting and different and striking. You may also have a re-look at the angle of lighting. Anything to catch the eye of the voter and still be your interpretation.

The B&W is great, but have you thought about a Duo- or even quad tone?

I think, please forgive it if I am going too specific, the little white spot on the collar could have been removed. The human eye, we all know, is drawn to those 'high lights', however small.
Finally, a little more contrast would surely improved the overall look.

One thing I have to say, you have a very good eye and are really creative. Invest a bit more time in mastering post processing, you are never going to be sorry.


Ik heb een definitieve aanbeveling, sorry voor dit niet in het Nederlands en niet België. Ik wil echt meer van uw kunst te zien. Help mee vaker! Alsjeblieft?


docpjv

Hope Rising
by MArteSi

Comment by tome:
This reminds me of a painting and I can't remember which one. Very interesting, one of my choices for blue.

Hope Rising
by MArteSi

Comment by Lydia:
Perfectly done. (not voting)

lucifer
by MArteSi

Comment by eye4beauty:
beautiful idea and colors but it seems kind of flat? a little too monochromatic, maybe if some of it was less smooth and brighter?

No Woman No Cry
by MArteSi

Comment by Gatorguy:
Hi, Critique Club here...

I enjoyed this image but for a couple reasons I can understand the lower scores (although I do not believe it deserved and twos).

You've gotten the technical aspects nailed down well. Exposure of the subject, Sharpness, DOF, all good.

So what held the scores back?

My opinion is there is too much going on that detracts from the actual subject, the shoes. All those onions are dominating the photo to the point where the shoes seem like they were added to a photo about onions. I think if you had used only one onion the photo would have been stronger for the challenge theme. You still could have propped a shoe on it, and also maybe had a diagonal to play with in the composition. I would have gotten rid of the stem that is on camera left.

Just one persons opinions. If I voted in the challenge, I would have given this a 6 for meeting the challenge and being technically well done.