Zulu Warrior
by rossl

Comment:
a good start to your dpc addiction!

is this shakaland, in eshowe? my husband is a banana boy, from durban and general kzn.

good shot. it might have been better if you had tried without flash - although i'm not sure if your camera does it. that would have given you more blur, but could have been very dramatic. the problem with on-camera flash is that the light tends to fall off, as you see here in the upeer portion of the image.

but, taking your image as it is here, what would i do with it? probably run it through some noise rduction software. sometimes noise works really well, but here it may be just distracting. thendo some screen (lighter) and multiply (darker) layers (all this is in photoshop. if you have something else, i'm sure there are similar things you can do in that program) there's a tutorial here for layer masks, as well as a whole bunch of other useful tips on processing.

here's a quick and sloppy rework - i know i've destroyed the heat shimmers - that would take a lot more work to bring out! possible, but not in 5 minutes! this isn't legal in basic, but gives a sense of what can be done.


keep shooting!

Pram Racing
by Transit

Comment:
we used to do this when we were kids. this is fab. nicely done!

Day 10: Missed Opportunity
by Blue Moon

Comment:
well done! great shot, funny, well composed and super b/w conversion.

edit: that would be Well done, not ell done. can't type.

Message edited by author 2007-05-14 09:32:18.

Rock/Paper/Scissors
by GeneralE

Comment:
a very nice triptych indeed. my only quibble is the rather small negative space below ihte rock. it feels a little cramped

Dadaist Panty Liners
by krnodil

Comment:
anyone using dadaist sensibilities gets my vote. nice one!

Theodor Geisel's "Design For Death"
by GeneralE

Comment:
i also thought this was don's work. a great image, and it was very nice to see someone considering more than geisel's children's work. well done indeed.

F-clef for big F
by silverfoxx

Comment:
svetlana, do you keep one section of you house empty and spotless for your pictures?

Gettin' Jiggy At Buddhas Birthday Bash
by Wildcard

Comment:
an interesting and very busy image, with a stunning cultural juxtapososition.

morning interlude
by annah

Comment:
very nicely done indeed. a lovely image. the colour works very well.

Waterplay
by angelfire

Comment:
Hello, from the Critiqe Club

this is a nice image; three quite good shots contained within. tehcnically, the images are quite good, with good exposure and focus. i'll look at each image individaully and then tackle the composition as a whole.

the main image is quite good, with the dark leading line of the wall behind. the position of the girl, the dynamic contraposto curve is very nice. however, i find the girl a little washed out, with the large expanse of wall behind her, a wall that is quite close in tone and colour to her skin. i think a closer crop, a vertical orientation with the edges being quite close to her arms and legs, would have given you a much stronger and more exciting image. the viewers eyes would then be drawn inexorably to the girl, rather than wandering aimlessly on the stone textures. this is definitely the strongest of the three images, so you chose right there.

the sitting image is good; the shadow echoing the line of her right leg is very nice. the parallel lines of the shadow, her leg and her back set up a very visually powerful set of angles.

the image on the right, of her running, is probably the weakest in the compostion. it's nice, but is much more evocative of a 'snapshot'. this is not a bad thing, but when compared to the other two, i find this one looks much less exciting.

as a triptych, i find the images work well, but need to be arranged differently. while the image of the girl sitting works very well beng 'inserted' in the wall, the running shot just looks awkward where it is. i think these images would be served much better by a cleaner presentation, on a solid background. the wall and water of the main image actually distract from the viewr from being able to see the girl clearly. (i lovel the texture of the wall directly behind the running shot, and end up looking at it more than the girl). also, the very small size of the subsidiary images make them quite hard to see.

There's a great feeling of energy and fresh summer in this triptych. right now this is a lovely family snapshot image to have on your fridge, but with a little work, it could be a very good piece of art.

great work, keep shooting!

If you have any questions or comments about this critique, please PM me. i hope the above is useful,

Cheers,

Christian

Message edited by author 2007-05-09 23:05:28.