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JeremyFleuryComment: from the critique club:
I can appeciate the intent as there is great potential here. First, allow me to get the technical out of the way. No apparanr technical flaws. The exposure is satisfactory and the focus is great. The general clarity and lighting are all good.
It is the composition that detracts. A camera is a two dimensional instrument as such care must always be taken because what looks fully acceptable to the eyes (3 dimension) may suffer in two dimension. For example, the moment the viewer begins to look at this image the eyes end up to discern the subject's face. Note here how the first face eclipses the second into almost a quarter moon. Nothing wrong with these angles under certain circumstances, but follow the contour of the first face and a little bit of ambiguity is present. The viewer is then tempted to guess the facial expression. If you accept this then a different angle would have made the better image. There appears to be quite an absorption and interest expressed. A better angle would have raised this image from the snapshot feel it now has. Not at all a typical snapshots as they are not that generally sharp.
In changing the angle, more strength can be added by eliminating everything but the computer thing. Two faces absorbed and looking down into this little box with the camera right in front. I believe this is the image you missed here. However, we all look and sometimes the best occurs to us after it is all over.
This leads to the next suggestion: always try to visualize the image you want and then go get it. Believe me, it beats searching for one, though at times we do get lucky.
You obviously have the talent to take a good image as demostrated by this image, all you need do is plan a little and your results will improve at once. Make your next image better.
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