Gone But Not Forgottenby
SJCarterComment: from the cririque club:
There is a definite message with this subject. Like most subjects, the problem is to make a presentation that exploits its' essence. While there was a house here, the growth of trees has made capture of the history a little difficult. Presented with such a subject, just the thought that the chimney still stands adds a strong interest. The problem is that we have to work with what we have and this will force the chimney to compete with the sprouting trees and there are many to contend with. I do agree with going ahead with the image and this opens up an exploration to find the most advantageous angle, if one exists.
As is, the image is more a recording of a factual item but the clutter of different textures takes away from the intent. I would have certainly considered a closer take showing the base of the chimney. You see, we find a subject and for some reason we feel we must make a recording and this is fine, but when we enter a challenge, we want the image to be more impressive. We think that if we go closer it will not tell the whole story. This is true, but the object is to display a unique view. However, this is not so easily accomplished. For example, is there any hint on any of the sides of the base that still retains the frame of the actual burning pit. On short is there anything else of interest that could have allowed a closer image of about 6 feet of the base? I am sure you did your homework and therefore this is the best that can be done as is.
The problem I have is that I can view this image in two ways: In the first I have a lead in tree which even blocks the base of the structure. I then have two more trees jutting along side making the vertical composition busy because the foliage jumps right in.
In the second, I do see your point clearly, a chimney that was once part of a house and so long ago that the trees have blossomed where this house once stood.
Understand, that these two views are held at the same time and so the viewers' mind wonders if a better angle was available. In reality, you did relate your idea of the house that was and the remnant which remains, but the image while correct does not rise to receive the wonder contained herein.
Now, and I say this sincerely, we often find subjects that are fascinating but for whatever reason we are unable to take advantage. This is not your fault and the important point is that you are on the lookout for interesting images and it is only a case of allowing the law of averages to aid you and it will. Keep searching. I made a similar error in the Landmarks' challenge. I said wow, Washington and Lafayette ate underneath the aplle tree and it is still there. Well, I tried to capture the whole thing and in basic editing the wire lines were going to cost me and it did.
I note from your port that you also have a very good eye, so again, this appeared as a strong subject but perhaps too elusive to accent the abstract universal principle of the flavor of ruins.
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