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MelethiaComment: Darkness is necessary in a study of light. I'm wondering what could make this better and I'm not getting anywhere with the wondering. I think you could probably lose the strip of light in the foreground and crop to the shadow above it. He cuts a lovely figure and is showing proper respect for what he's looking at, but if he were St Paul on the road to Damascus he would be looking at the source of the light instead of away from it. Where he's looking it becomes more a study of the architecture than a study of the light and my wondering asks if a bit of the architecture could be more clearly illuminated there ... Not in basic editing.
Also it's a candid and a study of the man, so there's no 'improvement' needed there.
Poem:
Autumnal Retirement
When old folks' final days are halcyon
and leave them something, even of this slow
awareness that is all we ever know,
they talk. Old ears enjoy the conversation;
their voices play up in the minor tone.
Their arcane, everyday arpeggio
moves to its own tunes, like the flow
of water in the tide charts of an ocean.
A cutting edge crests up upon a wave,
a stirring in the rising of the tide
but, where they once behaved heroically,
there is no challenge left to make them brave;
nothing to make, to alter, or decide.
Events occur now, tautologically.
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