The Look
by bryantbus

Comment:
Hello from the Critique Club

Let me start out by saying I gave this photo a seven. It is a very alluring pose that is seductive but not overly so. The model's expression is perfect, she draws your eyes in and holds them and that gives this shot a lot of impact.

The main thing that bothers me about this shot is the camera position. At this angle, it appears that her feet would be elevated above her head. This gives it a subtle feeling of tension that seems out of place. I tinkered around in Photoshop and rotated the image 25 degrees CCW. This put her in a position where her feet would be in a slightly lower than her head and gave it a much more relaxed feel.

I might also crop out the bottom of the bed. What appears to be a metal frame detracts from the feeling of softness in the rest of the composition.

Your comment made me think you might not be satisfied with the work you did on her eyes. I think you did really well with this. Her eyes really stand out, but you didn't take it too far.

Well done!

-Bill

Vera - 2006
by kari1

Comment:
Hello from the Critique Club!

There are just a few things I see here that could use a little tweaking. The lighting is what I think kept this photo from scoring higher. The light on the her right side is too harsh. I am assuming this is natural light coming in from a window. It may have helped to partially close a shade, or position something in between her an the light to lessen it some. Another option would be to lightly use the burn tool in post processing since this was an advanced editing challenge. I like that you have two light sources and that they are not equal in strength. The lighting on her left side is much softer and has a more comforting feel. Adding some fill flash would help brighten up her eyes, which seem to be a little dark. One final nit-pick would be the cropping. The edge of the frame cuts out some of her hair. This makes it feel cramped. Allowing the background to completely surround her head would help with this.

You had a few comments where people said you over sharpened. I really think you did a nice job with this. People's eyes may have been drawn to her lips and chin, where the wrinkles are more pronounced, but looking at her cheeks tells me that this really is natural. Another thing fill flash may have done is make the wrinkles a little less pronounced.

Her pose is wonderful. She seems quite relaxed and comfortable. It makes me feel like she has just finished telling a story of one of her life experiences, and is now looking at me to make sure her point sinks in!

-Bill

Yashica Man
by annah

Comment:
This is one of my favorites in this challenge. I hope it does well for you!

Dancing Dress
by imagemakersphoto

Comment:
Not sure using a white background for a white dress works well. It makes the picture look washed out.

What was old is new again!
by texaskev

Comment:
Wonderful shot except for the background. Maybe a shallower DOF would help.

Shelleys since 1893
by Firsty

Comment:
This is a little to heavy on the green.

Ancient Skill, Not Forgotten
by HOOlovesdrums

Comment:
I think to make her skill have more of an impact, we would need a better view of what she is doing.

Old Idea
by idnic

Comment:
You are so right about this!!!

Transition... (The aging process!)
by kbhatia1967

Comment:
Great idea! (I think the 4th from the left is in the wrong spot) :-)

old street
by quinde

Comment:
The angle is off just enough so that I can't tell if you did it on purpose or accident. I think I would prefer it more if it were level.