Im afraid I dont like this. It looks like you set up the shot nicely, but that you then asked someone to pose for you while you tested the focus and lighting on your camera. She doesnt look like the model that should be there. Its also to dark. 4
there is no contrast in your shot whatsoever... if you have photoshop or can do so on your camera open the histogram for this image, there are no 'light' areas whatsoever in the shot.