Hi Dan, a very interesting image here.....
A black and white picture always gives me a thrill, as though someone has taken extra care to prepare an image for viewing.
After some time with the picture
Leaning out of the window with you, I see what you see. Those lines, do they still work, were they meant to be put in like that....I wonder. I can hear the sounds of the city now and my eyes stray to the hills and yes, mountains, that's where I'd like to be. But for now I'm happy at the window, wondering about those wires.
No worries about composition, this is life as you see it, can't go messing with that. The image looks slightly flat and the histogram stops well before it gets near the white/highlight end. Sliding that white point to the left a bit in levels just gives the picture a bit of a lift, a bit more dimension to add to the experience of really being there. (Try it and see how the shadows of the wires and the pole suddenly pop into life)
A good, thoughtful image that will not appeal to everybody as you can see from your score. Don't ever let that put you off, there will be people out there that like what you see. If you can take pleasure in seeing, capturing and sharing what you come across then you have done well.