If that were coming out of an eye it would score an 11! The concept is ok, and the red light leads nicely into the background, but there is really no emotional impact, or message for that matter.
Great idea, just not quite there execution wise. The close up means that you lose the focus as the "spokes" exit the frame. This is very distracting and moves the viewer's eye around the image too much. I love the background color and the way the twisted metal was light though. Better luck next time.