First thing I notice is the the fishing line. I know it is difficult in basic. I do enjoy this concept, however the overall image is a bit flat in tone.
Looking at the image, you do have very nice separation between subject and background although if that is poster board I can see the texture/fiber of the board and not sure that works well here. However there is no shadow so that is a huge plus.
One thing that bothers me is the smoking nub, now I like the smoke idea, maybe wish there was a bit more or it was a bit thicker, what distracts me is the green piece sticking out the end. I understand it had to stick out to be able to easily retrieve it, however I wonder if you tried with a bit more of an angle on the weapon to hide that bit.
Looking at the edges of your subject they do seem slightly blurred, it could be for motion of dangling and the slower shutter speeds. Personally I believe a nice crisp edge around the weapon would really make it stronger.
It also appears your lighting is artificial, perhaps a lamp or such. To me it feels a bit yellow, maybe the white balance is off just a bit. However I am curious how this would have looked as a b/w with a higher contrast?
I enjoy how you lit the subject although I wish the 'highlight' light was a bit stronger. Overall its a good concept and with a couple minor tweaks can be a really solid image.
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