Simpler shots need to be absolutely perfect to get any merit with the dpc crowd.. The composition seems kind of tight.. so more negative space would be good.. and light definitely too dull.. if you don't have any great light sources take things outside.. I can see the dof is actually shallow and not out of focus as it may seem the first time around but the light doesn't allow us to view it in full glory.. and I don't like the background colour.. takes away prominence away from the subject..