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09/14/2007 12:14:46 PM |
Critique Club feedback:
For a setup shot, you've shown a good eye for creating a scene that works well with the subject. Here the strong points of the image are the perspective of the street moving back to the horizon and centering the subject within those lines to make her pop out of the scene.
Things that likely held this back are the overall darkness of the image, the background clutter coming up from behind her head and a slightly soft focus on the subject.
If you have access to a flash, that would help light the subject so she stands out more while still allowing you to catch the soft morning light in the sky behind her. You could also take another stab at using various masks and other assorted digital wizardry in your image editor to see what could be done - but there is never a replacement for getting the lighting right 'in real life'.
Shooting the model from a lower point of view, or physically moving her forward to block the clutter coming up from her head would help as well. I would keep the centered placement, just find a spot that hides the light poles. Centered compositions are often panned, but think it works very well here.
Sharp focus is the bread and butter of scoring on DPC. This looks like a dimly lit scene so if you were on auto-focus, your camera might have been struggling to stay locked on. Manual focus may be your friend in a situation like this.
Overall, nice shot! |
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09/08/2007 02:47:11 PM |
| Great shot Corrie. You have a unique world to photograph, I would definitly consider making these shots public after the war or once you get home. I think it would do well. It's also important to show a bit of that world as well...the good moments and not always the bad ones like we tend to see none stop now in Iraq ( not trying to tone down the horrors of the war here), Good work. I always enjoy going through your portfolio. |
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09/08/2007 05:46:25 AM |
| Your part of the world is far more civilized than where I've been - or so it appears from this! I thought you'd put a Marine over a shot taken from elsewhere but now that I think about it, that wouldn't have been possible given the time frame of the shoot. I do like this. And tell Corey she's a good sport for getting up at 6 am! |
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09/07/2007 11:31:14 PM |
| The traditional no-no of having background items springing from her head actually creates a "crowning" effect that I find quite moving. Unfortunately, the more I look at it, the more I realize that this is not a miraculous candid in a war zone, but a carefully staged Larus photo of a beautiful model in fatigues. You had me going for quite a while, though. But I'm not sure what that gets you. |
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09/07/2007 09:06:58 PM |
| Great concept, but I don't like the light-pole tree growing out of his head (that wasn't meant as some sort of ironic statement was it?) |
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09/06/2007 10:26:09 PM |
| An interesting take on Larus' series. While the technicals are not close to Larus', the low lighting and lack of fill does help give it mood and character something Larus' own commercialized work tends to lack. I think something in between would be idea. |
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09/05/2007 06:46:52 PM |
| the light poles behing her head are a little distracting. |
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09/04/2007 04:07:43 PM |
| Well I do like the colors and DOF but having those lightposts growing out of the head is not exactly what I would call flattering, I would have placed the model elsewhere, crouched down or failing that, removed them in post processing. 6 from me. |
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09/04/2007 12:14:26 PM |
| I really like the apparent juxtaposition of a fully armed Marine walking down a street in Hometown, USA. |
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09/04/2007 11:45:37 AM |
| Nice idea. Good composition. Still a little too dark on the front of the subject. |
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09/04/2007 10:02:29 AM |
| Beautiful light, wonderful warm cast. I really like everything about this photo, except for all those light masts coming out of the head. |
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09/02/2007 09:36:34 PM |
| What's that growing out of his head? |
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09/02/2007 01:04:38 PM |
| The lamp posts "sprouting" from the head are unfortunate... =( |
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09/02/2007 07:54:41 AM |
| Well that's the most unusual hair-do I have ever seen a soldier sporting! |
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09/02/2007 07:44:42 AM |
| Very emotive shot. Well composed.7 |
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09/01/2007 03:15:06 PM |
I love how the other lights seem to be coming out of the head. I hate seeing such a young person in such a precarious situation. God speed.
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09/01/2007 11:02:27 AM |
| nice shot but i don't like the light poles coming out of their head |
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09/01/2007 08:11:17 AM |
| Nice shot. I find the background very distracting, especially around the soldier's head though. I really like the lighting. |
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09/01/2007 12:38:21 AM |
| Oh there are lights coming out of the head! A little to centred IMHO. Good Luck. |
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