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08/13/2007 03:52:03 PM |
Greetings from the Critique Club! Per your request I am offering and "in-depth comment" on your entry...I hope you find it helpful. Also, welcome to DPC and congratulations on entering your first challenge. (The first challenge is often the most difficult.)
The subject you chose to represent "triumph" fits the challenge fairly well. However, I agree with some of the comments you received that it is mostly a representation of someone else's idea--in this case, the sculptor and the photographer on whose work the sculpture was based. It's good to try to bring your own interpretation to the subject, even if it has as its subject a sculpture (or other piece of artwork). Viewers want to see your own interpretation of it, something new. A few other mentioned including fireworks or a sunset...including unique elements like those can make your photo stand out.
Technically the photo has some common problems that hurt its reception by the voters. The shadows are so black that much of the detail has been lost and the light on the flag so harsh that it has also lost detail and contrast. It looks like you took the image in full noon sun when getting a good exposure is difficult. Cloudy days and morning or evening light are generally more successful times to take images like this one.
The composition lacks some strength. Including tree branches as you have done here can add framing and scale to an image...but because they only peek in from one side in this image it does not work so well. Here it looks like they mistakenly intruded into the frame. Having some to the other side would provide balance and indicate that their inclusion was intentional. Finding a different angle to take the image could help. Getting in closer to the subject and only taking a portion of the sculpture might make a stronger composition, too, showing us what you found really compelling about the subject and simplifying the presentation so the viewer knows where to place attention.
Overall, you met the challenge in a sort of scavenger-hunt way. I think you'll find that to really succeed in a DPC challenge you need to bring a bit more of yourself to the image...go a little beyond the "hey look what I found" and more toward showing us how you feel about the thing you found.
Good luck! Keep shooting! |
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08/07/2007 12:23:12 AM |
| Nice concept and composition. The lighting looks a bit harsh. I like the black and white, but the tones are just a touch flat. :) |
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08/06/2007 03:17:30 AM |
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08/05/2007 07:49:36 AM |
| Leaves are distracting and the soldiers are too dark. More detail in the soldiers would have helped. |
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08/05/2007 02:01:58 AM |
| not very creative from my point of view - you just seem to have captured someone elses work - just my opinion - maybe with fireworks behind it or a smashing sunset/sunrise it could work a little better good luck |
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08/05/2007 12:26:45 AM |
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08/03/2007 08:59:02 AM |
| Good idea, but terrible lighting and glare. |
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08/03/2007 01:25:37 AM |
| The penultimate triump shot I suppose. Focus could be a little crisper here. |
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08/02/2007 11:06:12 PM |
| This is a pic of success annd triumph!! |
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08/01/2007 11:26:43 PM |
| A true symbol of triumph. Maybe try and have more detail in the statue itself though. |
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08/01/2007 09:16:43 PM |
| Nice point of view of a photo classic. Fits the challenge perfectly. I wish this were sharper.. |
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08/01/2007 05:30:53 PM |
| wish you could have gotten better lighting on the flag..that's the whole point of this memorial; looks like a hard one to capture... |
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08/01/2007 03:50:27 PM |
| this looks too gray, it seems to have an exposure problem. The tree on the side needs to be cropped or have more of it showing. |
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08/01/2007 03:09:54 PM |
| I'm not liking the way the cotnrast faded the flag, and blacked out the faces. Makes them look somewhat monstrous (or like Marvin the Martian). |
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08/01/2007 04:53:22 AM |
| Nice study but for a statue that is still I think the technical skills should be pretty perfect and this image looks a little soft and muzzy - The exposure seems a little off too. |
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08/01/2007 12:21:02 AM |
| little bit too much noise in the sky... |
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